An exercise in rhyme

An exercise in rhyme

A Poem by Nigel Newman
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Reading other folks' poems I realised how much I liked lines where the rhyme was somewhere other than the final word. Hence this exercise.

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Facing the waves

Alone, save for the company of gulls

Pocketed hands, I skulk and bear the onshore wind

I have sinned all these times

Unfeeling crimes.


Facing the facts

Guilty of acts of neglect

Deselected as your lover and friend

Here at the end I have come to this

Missed opportunities.  Debts.

And regrets.



© 2017 Nigel Newman



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Reading other folks' is always inspiring. And reading your An exercise in rhyme is a delight!

Posted 1 Week Ago


Making the rhyme not look deliberate is a hard task(atleast for me). You have maintained the structure and kept the imagery flowy at the same time.
I'm very glad I came across this piece.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Nigel Newman

3 Months Ago

Thanks for dropping by.

It takes a bit of practice but it's fun to try.
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The rhyming sequence did not change your head on attack on little pieces of real. Just...pieces of real. Yup, I'm a fan.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Hi Nigel! I love the edgy rhyming pattern -it gives the words a unique "pop"! You are a WordMaster, so eloquent and elegantly descriptive, "Pocketed hands, I skulk and bear the onshore wind"...I can see the lonely silhouette and feel the stinging breeze of "Missed opportunities. Debts. And regrets." Introspective, insightful & Brilliant.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Nigel Newman

5 Months Ago

It was an interesting exercise. I'm rather 'anti' poems that, to me, seem to compromise word choice .. read more

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Nigel Newman
Nigel Newman

Bristol, United Kingdom



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