Waiting in the rain

there was big thunderstorm today so I wrote this

 WAITING IN THE RAIN

TRYING TO ERASE 

THIS PAIN

COOL METAL FALLING DOWN MY WRISTS

THIS IS SWEET BLISS

IN THE RAIN I CAN HIDE MT SHAME

GRAB MY HAND AND TELL ME IT'S ALRIGHT

PULL MY UP FROM THIS ETERNAL FIGHT OF DARKNESS

RECREATE ME

BREAK ME INTO A THOUSAND PEICES

SEW MY HEART UP AND STOP THE BEATING
OF THE RAIN HITTING MY SHOULDERS

CRUSHING ME IT'S GETTIG COLDER

MY HAIR IS GETTING UNTAME

AND IT'S GETTING HARDER TO BREATH

WHILE WAITING IN THE RAIN

Author's Note

no I don't cut my self when it says cool metal falling down my wrists!

Reviews

[Kyle]

lol(z) thank god u dont cut urself!!!!! ok, the imagery in this poem is amazing, the reader truly feels the emotions portrayed within this poem, ur writing is not at all one dimensional, it expresses many different feelings and the way you created ur stanzas is truly inspiring. great write!!! keep up the good work, lol!!

[Manhunt[er]]

Waiting in the rain is fun!

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Excellent poem! Despite a fair few typos, it was easy read. It flowed perfectly and the rhyming was great! The content was cool too. I love the rain. ^^ No matter depressed we may feel in the rain, a good shed of tears in a thunderstorm is always cleansing. :)

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood