I KNOW WHAT YOU ARE but what am i ?

man v.s self

 YoUr So SeLfIsH dId YoU kNoW tHaT?

NO I DIDN'T

YoUr So UgLy DiD yOu KnOw ThAt?

NO I DIDN'T

              BUT ON THE INSIDE I KNOW I AM SO YOU MUST BE MY OUTSIDE

YoUr ShAkInG dId YoU kNoW tHaT?

NO I DIDN'T

I'm LeAnInG oN yOuR nEcK dId YoU kNoW tHaT?

NO I DIDN'T

               BUT ON THE OUTSIDE I KNOW I AM SO YOU MUST BE MY INSIDE

Author's Note

i know it's kind of confusing but thats kinda the point hope you like it :)

Reviews

[A sea person]

It's really interesting. I like how it seems like the second speaker has almost given up trying to argue, just saying, "NO I DIDN'T" so that the other voice won't belabor the point.

I also really like the use of capitalization, though I think having the second person's line in all caps is at odds with what they're saying. there is very little emphasis on the words, "NO I DIDN'T" aside from the capitalization. I don't know if that's why you added the capitalization or what, but it just seems out of place with the way the poem comes across.

I don't get what the speaker means by, "I'm LeAnInG oN yOuR nEcK dId YoU kNoW tHaT?" could you clarify?

Anyway, your poem is very well written. It reads really well, and it holds the reader's interest. You did an awesome job!

v.r.
Ryan

[unspokenguilt]

Very interesting...man vs. self it's almost like he doesn't want to believe that he's "ugly" (at least on the inside) but a part of him knows it, it's a struggle within his self.

Bravo, and thanks for entering the contest!
:) elyssa