I can't see anymore

oh noessss im blind!!!!!

 I TRULY DON'T SEE ANY POINT

                                        I JUST KEEP GOING ON

                                        I TRY TO SEEM ALIVE

BUT I'M NO LONGER LIVING

                                        I NO LONGER WANT TO 

                                        GO ON IF I SEE NO REASON TO

IF I CAN'T SEE 

                                       I DOUBT THERE IS ONE

                                       TO SEE AT ALL

FROM THIS LONLEY HEART

                                       TO DECAYING THOUGHTS

                                       OF WHAT I LEFT BEHIND

SLOWLY DRIVE ME TO

                                       WONDER, I SEARCH FOR SOMETHING

                                       TO LET ME LIVE AGAIN

IF I'D EVER LIVED BEFORE

                                       I WONDER IF THERES ANYONE

                                       ELSE LIKE ME

MAYBE I CAN'T SEE AT ALL AND THAT'S WHY I FEEL THIS WAY

Author's Note

i guess it's about a vampire

Reviews

[A sea person]

? what? about a vampire? and here I was thinking it was a wonderful demonstration of the struggle teenagers go through every day of their lives, perfectly demonstrating the difficulty in "fitting in" and hanging with the "right crowd." The feeling that they're all alone in the world, no one else is going through the same thing that they are...The mental struggle to cope with the rush of changes...Even the cavalier attitude that lurks in society's messages to the teenage population...

But then again, it makes perfect sense from a supernatural being's point of view as well. SO it could pretty much be anything. :) Good job!

My only critique is that it's in all capitals again. You loose some of the EMPHASIS (see? Your eyes are automatically drawn to that!) when you put the whole thing in capitals.

But, as I said earlier, it is a great poem! Brilliant choice of topic for you (I've noticed the trend that you tend to write more about feelings and mental stress).

v.r.
Ryan

[Last Lying Look]

That's kind of interesting that it was about a vampire. Just like Ryan. my first thought was that it was about teenagers and such. I was thinking it was about depression. And if it had of been it would have made this poem like a lot of others that I've read today. But it wasn't. It was about a vampire. Which was pretty brilliant, I must say. I can understand how it's about a vampire. A lonely vampire who is trying to fit in with society and is wondering if there are any others. Great poem :)

-Elissa