Untouched Darkness

I wrote this is science extra help LOL

 To remain                        untouched                  by time is crazy

To remain                        untouched              by time is scary to want

but when                               your                       memory turns hazy

the proposal stays          beside              you to taunt

you into                               the                  deal of sands

as you agree                 darkness           covers the day

wrapping chains          around           the lands

you will                          never               be the same way

pale is your                    face                your legs your hands

your heart lays          broken       and blackened on the floor

your lungs and           hunger          cry out

blood is what you       need              so lick you lips and taste

relish the                       crimson           color

ravage the fiery             flavor          with haste

sleep in during the day,    breaking          against the sky

awaken when it goes              away        and shadows control you when you go out to fly.

Author's Note

if you read the columns down the lines and don't connect them it kinda makes out messages

Reviews

[Chaos Stone]

this is what i meant when i said shy away from so much rhyme
this work is very esoteric and mysterious and its meaning is veiled and can evoke anything in the readers mind
kudos

[J.Black]

OH This is fantastic!!

[jumbie's #1 fan]

this is awesome. it takes real talent to write a poem in two different ways. it's really cool. it also sounds like it would be a great song

[Aileen]

read it both ways n wow i luv it! u did a great job. keap up th great work
ur friend
Aileen