Inherently Flawed

I've been isolating myself, not answering calls, my family's upset but they don't understand that i'm flawed

My family mad when they call I don't answer

Depression consuming my mind like a cancer

They quick to condemn but don't know my life's anthem

A soon to be swan song happiness needs a ransom

Persistent pervasive  it won't let me go

Can't help but feel lonely when you're the only one who knows

The despondence that permeates every crevice of the mind

We all have our reasons life's too unkind

Author's Note

ignore grammar

Reviews

[pia]

You shouldn't always worry about grammar when it comes to poems
I actually love free writing and stuff that comes from your heart actually brings out a brighter effect thsn anything else. And thats what i love about this poem. Raw emotions !!! Great

[Fanicia E.]

Thanks! I'm not worried, I just put it so people won't nitpick at it instead of focusing on the content or message.

[pia]

Then u dont need those negative people in your life
Keeo doing you thing

[Fanicia E.]

thanks! :)

[T.S. Sky]

This is very good and relateable.

[Fanicia E.]

I'm glad you think so! Thanks for the review :)

[T.S. Sky]

You're welcome.

[Anne Korhonen]

Very well chosen rhymes. The poem flows perfectly. I can relate to the subject of depression because I've been through it myself. A very touching poem. I love the spoken word vibe in the language.

[Fanicia E.]

Thank you Anne, I really appreciate that! I'm sorry you've had to deal with it. It's something I wouldn't wish on my worst enemy.
I'm glad you like the spoken word vibe, I don't think I have more than a few poems similar to this style, but I surprised myself, and it's always refreshing to try something new. Thanks again for the review!

[emmajoy]

Free verse often frees the mind of a billion concerns, flaws, sadnesses.. etc.. You've expressed what you need to - maybe feel better, same, hopefully not worse. Fanicia, your writing is powerful... you could write a novel and fly!

[Fanicia E.]

Wow! Thank you Emma that means so much to me!

[emmajoy]

Meant every word.. just hope you didnt notice the typos i've now corrected! You keep writing my frien d.. cos your thoughts are looking so far forward i'll not be able to keep up with you.. :)

[Fanicia E.]

lol no I didn't see them and I'm glad to have a friend that has so much faith in me. You are an astoundingly positive force to all you encounter and may you never change 😊

[rowan.taylorrr]

i really really love this piece: well done !!

[Fanicia E.]

Thank you very much!

[Pravir]

Sad . . . but very beautifully written . . . and it deep . . loved to read

[Fanicia E.]

Thank you. I'm glad I was able to write something that spoke to you

[Nora]

This is so amazing, simple and deep , I really love it

[Fanicia E.]

Thank you, I really do appreciate it

[Nora]

My pleasure 😊😊😊