Echoes

Dream on and listen to your heart. Work on the voices within you before they become mere echoes. The world has so much to offer. It can be kind but it can be very cruel too.

The fire burns and blazes

 Inside the soul 

 She turns and gazes 

 At the world.

 Dreams and goals, 

 Scattered all over the place

 Heart full of passion 

 Trying to keep up with the pace. 

 A whirlwind of echoes 

 Twisting the inside.

 Chaos of the mundane world

 Blurring the outside. 

 Crumbles the soul 

 As the body decays. 

 But shines once more 

 In those dazzling sun rays.

 This perplexed human mind 

 The complexities of emotion. 

 This wonder world

  In ecstatic motion.

Author's Note

The idea in the last stanza is based on Rumi's quote "Stop acting so small. You are the universe in ecstatic motion".

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This is a great example of the wonders made when solemnity meets profundity. This makes us think, and stop to take it all in. It has marvellous musicality and the imagery is powerful. One little factor that I should comment on is the phrase is "to keep up WITH the pace" not "to". Other than that, well done!

[nefalnumair]

Ahh right thank you for correcting me. Love the review. Glad you liked it. Thank you!

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Zwitter]

Enjoyed your piece and felt the Rumi's whirling motions in spirit.

[nefalnumair]

Thank you. Glad u enjoyed it :)

[Kenken Malphas]

I love the imagery. Hope i could play with words the same way you do. My favorite :)

[nefalnumair]

Thank you so much. Glad you liked it! :)

[Final-Karma]

The rhythm of the poem was excellent. I love the play on words. The ending had me very curious. I am glad you included Rumi's quote. We are most definitely more than just specs within this giant orbital universe. Everything has a meaning and waves are sent out with every action. Definitely a favorite!

[nefalnumair]

Thank you for your review. Glad you liked it! I tried to convey the message of self confidence, very often we feel uncertain about ourselves and underestimate our own abilities. We need to have faith in ourselves to do great things. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts! :)

[DarkStar]

I seriously love this piece. Very well written

[nefalnumair]

Thank you so much. It means a lot. :)