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Echoes

Echoes

A Poem by nefalnumair
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Dream on and listen to your heart. Work on the voices within you before they become mere echoes. The world has so much to offer. It can be kind but it can be very cruel too.

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The fire burns and blazes
 Inside the soul 
 She turns and gazes 
 At the world.

 Dreams and goals, 
 Scattered all over the place
 Heart full of passion 
 Trying to keep up with the pace. 

 A whirlwind of echoes 
 Twisting the inside.
 Chaos of the mundane world
 Blurring the outside. 

 Crumbles the soul 
 As the body decays. 
 But shines once more 
 In those dazzling sun rays.

 This perplexed human mind 
 The complexities of emotion. 
 This wonder world
  In ecstatic motion.

© 2017 nefalnumair



Author's Note

nefalnumair
The idea in the last stanza is based on Rumi's quote "Stop acting so small. You are the universe in ecstatic motion".

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This is a great example of the wonders made when solemnity meets profundity. This makes us think, and stop to take it all in. It has marvellous musicality and the imagery is powerful. One little factor that I should comment on is the phrase is "to keep up WITH the pace" not "to". Other than that, well done!

Posted 3 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nefalnumair

3 Days Ago

Ahh right thank you for correcting me. Love the review. Glad you liked it. Thank you!
emipoemi

3 Days Ago

my pleasure.



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This is a great example of the wonders made when solemnity meets profundity. This makes us think, and stop to take it all in. It has marvellous musicality and the imagery is powerful. One little factor that I should comment on is the phrase is "to keep up WITH the pace" not "to". Other than that, well done!

Posted 3 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nefalnumair

3 Days Ago

Ahh right thank you for correcting me. Love the review. Glad you liked it. Thank you!
emipoemi

3 Days Ago

my pleasure.
I love the imagery. Hope i could play with words the same way you do. My favorite :)

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nefalnumair

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much. Glad you liked it! :)
The rhythm of the poem was excellent. I love the play on words. The ending had me very curious. I am glad you included Rumi's quote. We are most definitely more than just specs within this giant orbital universe. Everything has a meaning and waves are sent out with every action. Definitely a favorite!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nefalnumair

1 Week Ago

Thank you for your review. Glad you liked it! I tried to convey the message of self confidence, very.. read more
I seriously love this piece. Very well written

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nefalnumair

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much. It means a lot. :)

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Added on November 10, 2017
Last Updated on November 18, 2017
Tags: Dreams, optimism, passion, motivation, goals