my last everything

If I had one last breath to taste
It would be from your lips
Say you will stay


If I had one last word
It would be your name
Say yours would be the same


When the shadows stand tall upon my wall
Say I will find comfort in your arms


If I had one last face to see
Where my eyes would live with that forever vision and memory
Would you offer your eyes to the forever vision saved only for me


When my vision fades
And there is only an old loving me
When you see youth gone and the fog setting in
Will you still be next to me


When I am off out of this world and sailing upon the eternal seas
Where I am nothing more than a memory

Will I be fading and lost in time
Or will I be your forever picture,
on your unfading walls
of a forever memory hung on your forever wall.


Will I always be yours?
Because you will always be mine

Reviews

[McBear]

I really liked this. I feel like you can create your own images in your head of a lot of the lines.

[nocool]

thanks poison ;)

[McBear]

No problem at all c;

[Caitlin Rogers]

I love this poem, it is fantastic. I love your metaphors.

[nocool]

Thank you very much.

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

i love this poem, it is amazing. keep up the amazing work

[nocool]

thank you so much for your kind words.

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

welcome, friend

[Cody Jeremy Thompson]

Its a nice poem there isn't much i can say about it. It just gives you that feeling most similar poems do which is good cause it means it fulfilled its goal. All in all its good and I hope you'll publish more things in this group

[nocool]

thank you.

[Strawberry Evil]

So prettyyy. I like the style you write with, a lot of feelings behind it. This is a really pretty poem, a little long, but still stylish. Good job, keep going!

[nocool]

Thank you very much.