I SING TO ETERNITY

I SING TO ETERNITY

A Poem by Nolo Segundo

To my unmet friend:
You see the mortal world
and for you man is machine,
little more than a device
for the vagaries of evolution,
faith is illusion, hope lacks
weight and love? Can love
be other than mere sex,
nature's sole mandate?

And your science now tells
you: what can I ever know?
All is quantum topsy-turvy,
and mother nature part
w***e, part illusionist...
your thinking breaks all
down to little pieces,
and nothing matters
as matter is all while
science the only god
left for us to worship.

And we are nothing,
not even dreams
anymore, just bits
and pieces to be
examined, classified,
and then ignored--
for science is all,
and faith but a
refuge for fools.

You are honest,
I know-- you see
yourself as just
another machine,
destined for decay,
then destruction--
your sentience but
a cruel joke told
yet again--and
no one laughs.

You and I--
we breathe,
we think,
we live-- but
you would stop
at death while
I begin there....

I sing to the eternal!
Quell not my songs
as they rise above
the despair born
of your vacant
world and follow
stars streaming
their wondrous
light in a dead-
cold universe.

I sing to eternity,
I sing to my soul.


(c.2014)

© 2016 Nolo Segundo



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To begin with, I love the title of your poem. There's just something about it that makes me feel good. :)

To my unmet friend:
The beginning is captivating and intriguing. I really like the concept of this "unmet friend".

You see the mortal world
and for you man is machine,
little more than a device
for the vagaries of evolution,
faith is illusion, hope lacks
weight and love? Can love
be other than mere sex,
nature's sole mandate?
These lines depict the modern man perfectly. Love has lost its purity, hope doesn't seem the same anymore and faith is questionable in these times. You took up a huge burden and explained it with a few chosen words perfectly. I highly commend your choice of words. Well done!

And we are nothing,
not even dreams
anymore, just bits
and pieces to be
examined, classified,
and then ignored--
for science is all,
and faith but a
refuge for fools.
Another brilliant stanza! I relate to this perfectly as I'm sure any literature student familiar with modernism will. You have done a brilliant job of portraying the condition of humans in this era.


You are honest,
I know-- you see
yourself as just
another machine,
destined for decay,
then destruction--
your sentience but
a cruel joke told
yet again--and
no one laughs.
This is astoundingly well-written. I don't think the pathetic human condition could be described in a better manner than this.

You and I--
we breathe,
we think,
we live-- but
you would stop
at death while
I begin there....
This stanza has so much depth! The play of words is mesmerising and the pauses add greatly to the sensation. I, somehow, feel this poem to the very depths of my being especially these verses.

I sing to the eternal!
Quell not my songs
as they rise above
the despair born
of your vacant
world and follow
stars streaming
their wondrous
light in a dead-
cold universe.
Once again, perfect choice of words and aptly formed expressions. This stanza truly rises above the despair.

I sing to eternity,
I sing to my soul.
I love the end. It sums up the poem beautifully. It reminds us that the soul is immortal while the body is not. The poem seems to counsel us to pay importance to our soul and consequently our heart; to value emotions like love, hope, faith above physical desires like greed or lust. It seems to reinforce the value of emotions in a world which has come to view humans merely as objects through which they can gain something. For me, therefore, the poem ia like a beacon of light in a world filled with darkness and despair. It is something that depicts the sorry state of affairs wonderfully and admonishes man as to what is important for him and how he should choose the same. A wonderful read! Keep up the great work! :)



Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nolo Segundo

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Bushra, for your perceptive exegesis. I learned 45 years ago when I almost drowned and ha.. read more



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Posted 5 Months Ago


Nolo Segundo

5 Months Ago

Your welcome!
To begin with, I love the title of your poem. There's just something about it that makes me feel good. :)

To my unmet friend:
The beginning is captivating and intriguing. I really like the concept of this "unmet friend".

You see the mortal world
and for you man is machine,
little more than a device
for the vagaries of evolution,
faith is illusion, hope lacks
weight and love? Can love
be other than mere sex,
nature's sole mandate?
These lines depict the modern man perfectly. Love has lost its purity, hope doesn't seem the same anymore and faith is questionable in these times. You took up a huge burden and explained it with a few chosen words perfectly. I highly commend your choice of words. Well done!

And we are nothing,
not even dreams
anymore, just bits
and pieces to be
examined, classified,
and then ignored--
for science is all,
and faith but a
refuge for fools.
Another brilliant stanza! I relate to this perfectly as I'm sure any literature student familiar with modernism will. You have done a brilliant job of portraying the condition of humans in this era.


You are honest,
I know-- you see
yourself as just
another machine,
destined for decay,
then destruction--
your sentience but
a cruel joke told
yet again--and
no one laughs.
This is astoundingly well-written. I don't think the pathetic human condition could be described in a better manner than this.

You and I--
we breathe,
we think,
we live-- but
you would stop
at death while
I begin there....
This stanza has so much depth! The play of words is mesmerising and the pauses add greatly to the sensation. I, somehow, feel this poem to the very depths of my being especially these verses.

I sing to the eternal!
Quell not my songs
as they rise above
the despair born
of your vacant
world and follow
stars streaming
their wondrous
light in a dead-
cold universe.
Once again, perfect choice of words and aptly formed expressions. This stanza truly rises above the despair.

I sing to eternity,
I sing to my soul.
I love the end. It sums up the poem beautifully. It reminds us that the soul is immortal while the body is not. The poem seems to counsel us to pay importance to our soul and consequently our heart; to value emotions like love, hope, faith above physical desires like greed or lust. It seems to reinforce the value of emotions in a world which has come to view humans merely as objects through which they can gain something. For me, therefore, the poem ia like a beacon of light in a world filled with darkness and despair. It is something that depicts the sorry state of affairs wonderfully and admonishes man as to what is important for him and how he should choose the same. A wonderful read! Keep up the great work! :)



Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nolo Segundo

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Bushra, for your perceptive exegesis. I learned 45 years ago when I almost drowned and ha.. read more
Your poem flows well and paints a powerful narrative.

A cynical and frightening picture of our world.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Nolo Segundo

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the compliments-- perhaps I am too pessimistic about our brave new secular and cy.. read more

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Nolo Segundo
Nolo Segundo

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From adolescence until I was 24, I was an agnostic. Then I almost drowned, and had what has come to be called a near death experience. So for the past 45 years I've known that the problem with life i.. more..

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