merry-go-round

wrote this a long time ago but its still good....

This life is like a merry-go-round

execept not so merry

never knowing when its going to stop

good moments in life

just spin right on by

leaving just a memorie

spinning so fast

blood being trhown around

for all to see

getting on everything and everyone

my wrists are slashed for the world to see

look at them

as my merry-go-round slows

this is my end

my friends

my time to get off has come

my blood staind everything

im alive

no more

Author's Note

this is back in my younger days of writing

Reviews

[Kaelani]

pure poetry

[mick weller]

merry-go round (merry-go-round?)
exept (except?)
its (short for it is, so it's it's)
memorie - like it - (instead of memory?) - stands out
trhown (thrown?)
staind (stained?)
im alive and aint i not bovvered...
great piece - I know you don't want these pokey picky bits, but by showing the reader that you care about your work... and I know it doesn't matter... really it doesn't but:

`my wrists are slashed for the world to see

look at them'

very bold writing again you
cheers for sharing this piece!

[chris' girlfriend]

u are an artist

nice