A moment!

 

Throughout my life I waited for a moment to come true,

Finally the moment came but even stayed for a moment too...

Reviews

[Vaishali..^_^]

so...this is so painful and beautiful...!

[Together]

This is painful!

[Roxy]

So thoughtful dear!

[Partha]

wow so beautiful! excellent.

[Travis Lawrence]

You use "but" instead of "and", then follow it with "even" and "too", interesting. It's like, the "but" contradicts the hopeful connotation at the end. I like what you did there.

[Innocent]

Brilliant!

[deadlife]

ah...such a pain....it's a brilliant write.
but on the bright side..it's life....i mean really that "moment"....comprised of all your life.....
to wait for a moment to come...and that is also for just a moment.........what else life is..when you get that one moment!
it's reminding me of one of my writing...hey all ....please forgive me for this (that's the next four lines)....as many of us will not be able to understand this...lol....=]

'zindgi ek boond hai, aur tu samandar ki tarah...
lag ja galey..ghul ja...isey aagosh mein tu le zara. . .
toot ker ik boond ban ja...ya isey ker samandar...
ik boond ka hai waasta... ik boond ka hai waasta. . ."

beautiful work dear....

blessings....
LIVE MOMENTS =]

~rupam

[Imperfection]

I have read the original version before.

Thanks to Bhavya for sharing this with me.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Isn't it painful :(
When you waits for a moment to come true throughout your life...
but unfortunately, it even stays for a moment..
Ah! So dark and beautiful indeed! :)

[forfila]

Nice, short and meaningful. I know the feeling of waiting for that moment, and if it stays then it is meant to be..

Nice write Love

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