Lost At Sea

Lost At Sea

A Poem by mae23

Your love is like an ocean.

I am a leaf dancing on the waves.
And though I am lost at sea,
I need not be saved. 

In deep, dark blue water,
You have hidden your secrets away.
But since I cannot swim that deep,
On the surface, I am forced to stay.

Your love is like an ocean.
I am a leaf dancing on the waves.
And though I am lost at sea,
I need not be saved. 

Strong are your currents.
They pull me left and right. 
And because I know their strength,
I never try to fight. 

Your love is like an ocean.
I am a leaf dancing on the waves.
And though I am lost at sea,
I need not be saved. 




© 2017 mae23



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Love this poem. Gentle, sweet, wise. Lovely imagery, rhythm and metaphor use- " I am a leaf dancing on the waves"-eloquent description of one immersed in love. Well-done!

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Posted 5 Months Ago


mae23

5 Months Ago

Thank you very much!
Beautiful and wonderful words for love. You gave life and vision with the good description. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

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mae23

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words. I'm so happy you enjoyed my piece.
Coyote Poetry

5 Months Ago

I did enjoy and you are welcome.
I really loved this piece, it was soothing in a sense!

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mae23

5 Months Ago

Thank you for reading!
Kesha

5 Months Ago

You're welcome
That's amazing! This is a really nice poem. I love how you have used personification kind of here. Its really beautiful. Loved the poem.

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mae23

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much!
Anjali

5 Months Ago

You are very welcome!
This is deep. Being trapped in another embrace, wishing not to be saved, and giving into their direction. Thank you for sharing this.

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mae23

5 Months Ago

Thank you for reading it! I'm glad I was able to get the meaning across
Chris

5 Months Ago

I'm glad I picked up the meaning well enough, and once again. Thank you.
Nicely expressed. I can almost feel the waves. But a love with strong currents and secrets hidden deep.. might be rather a stormy love.

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mae23

5 Months Ago

Thank you for reading! And yes it does seem like a stormy love affair

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