Ain't That A Shame

These are song lyrics, so I apologize for the crudeness of the sound or rhythm.

Got a dollar in my pocket

A bill to my name.

Don't know where I'm goin',

Ain't that a shame.

 

Sweet ride a waitin',
Don't know where to go.

North, west or south, Baby,

Only one way to know.

 

Slide behind the wheel

Hold on so tight.

One chance outta here,

One chance tonight.

 

Don't want the sun's day.

Can't take the light.

Give me the shadows,

Hand over the night.

 

Anything is better,

Then stayin' here.

Nothin' hold me back,

Nothin' to fear.

 

Got a dollar to my pocket,

Bill to my name.

Don't know where I'm goin'

Aint that a cryin' shame.

 

N. Strong

Author's Note

This is a song that has been floating round my head for some time. It feels like a jazz joint full of thick smoke and strong whiskey.

Reviews

[nora]

wow, this is great! personally, i found a more country feel to it, but maybe thats because of all the 'goin's, lol. but anyway, i really like this.

"Don't want the sun's day.
Can't take the light.
Give me the shadows,
Hand over the night."

i dont know why, but that part reminds me of someone with a really bad hangover, lol. you know, with them lying in a bed with the covers pulled over their head, the curtains closed, lol.

"Slide behind the wheel
Hold on so tight.
One chance outta here,
One chance tonight."

this part is defintetly my favorite. the imagery is great. i could totally imagine someone hopping into an old pick-up truck, skidding down a dirt road out of a small town. lol, i dont know if i got that completely wrong, but thats what i thought of :)
anyway, great song/poem Nyida :)

[Thomas B. Buckman]

Really awesome.

I have lived this lifestyle, and that is really close to how I saw things.

Well done :D

[Michael X]

purely lyrical. a quality and worthwhile journey. i loved this. it is such a brilliant song.

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

It works well as song.. maybe add a little hook ..in the background , but great lyrics..

[GenMuffin7]

i really like it, would love to hear it with music too, though it can also stand alone. reminds me of "Fast Car" by Tracy Chapman.

I actually didn't find the writing to be crude. It's got a nice rhythm to it, and as I was reading through it, a beat sort of struck up in my head. Catchy.

[Bethany Woody]

Deffinately jazz or blues. One of those New Oreleans places that has very little lighting and lots of colorful folks hangin around chain smokin. You need someone who has whiskey for a voice to sing it just right. I love this, it smooth and rolls right off the tongue. Wonderful job.

[Tony]

This could very well be a Ray Charles kind of song, yes, a little piano and alot of that Chris Botty trumpet sound...very moody. Terrific

Tony

[Meffers]

Wow, this would go great like you said, at some kinda blues place..

I have been listening to a lot of Dan Auerbach lately, the singer from The Black Keys. He is great and his new album is awesome blues.

Nice work.

[Demosthenes]

I enjoyed the sentiments. It does have a certain flavor to it. But I'll take a brandy over the whiskey ;P