TO THE EARTH

CREATURES THAT LIVE IN COLD MIRRORS

creature of the cold, called upon me
stared in my eyes, breathing me in
fluidly, nestled, reflecting my skin
he said "my name is seconds", and then time began
 
running water only fed his mystery
mirror fogged, askew went movement
I heard him say, something, quite disturbing
"trace do I not, line upon form"
"you the host opposite but warm"
"give unto me, stance in Your place"
"I will give thee, unyielding desire"
"those that conquer, and these that tease"
"all that I want is for You to feel me"
"let me feel the earth, stroke upon land"
"carry, culled fleshed of bit, nibbling hands"
"you've had enough and need such sleep"
"this is but easy, in my place so deep"
"cold devours this, need for endless strife"
"go on, go on, wipe the mirror clean"
"look back within my eye, see what I have seen"


my eyes had wept, the eternity felt
in dragging carcass stained, black upon reflection
my hand reached out, grabbing him then
solidly things grew cold, caressing me in
asleep at the wheel is the way it did seem
I turned back around to see the mirror with steam
he walked out, into the world, here I do set
waiting for seconds to finally come back 
 

Reviews

[Muse]

Woah this is deep.

heard him say, something, quite disturbing
"trace do I not, line upon form"
"you the host opposite but warm"
"give unto me, stance in Your place"

Was I witnessing a possession? Or were you conversing with your darker half?
This is both haunting and perplexing. But nevertheless a very enjoyable read!

[Souladareatease]

:) Thank You CL :) it was a comp. called creatures that kissed cold mirrors...You just had to make up something to fit it...that's what came out of my peanut :) (in my minds eye) it was lol reflecting on a time where I was living in cold misery and just numbly tucked away as each day went on by...horrid years...I lost taste for fight and life....that's what I drew on

[Lavery the Librettist]

Love the fourth line!! Well done :)

[Souladareatease]

Thank You for the read and kind comment Lavery:)

[Souladareatease]

I am Humbled by Your kind words Lavery, Thank You ever so much!!!

[Lily Mae]

"look back within my eye, see what I have seen"
I love this as a whole but this line is killer.. excellent write.. :) xo

[Souladareatease]

Thank You Dear Mae...This is not a favorite write ...it was sporadic as im prone to do...reflex writing has much truth of feeling of me...just not as cultured lines as I would like when I do so... but I despise to rewrite what has once been set to the outside world...

[Lily Mae]

Well I thought it was awesome..xo

[Souladareatease]

:)))

[Winslow Des Totes]

The flow to this is rather intense as the diction. Very well written!

[Souladareatease]

thank You so very much for picking up on it's intensity...it was written in a flurry of the passionate moment...instead of the ease... thank You too for stopping by to read, and time to comment

[The Creation]

what more can i say but, "Beautifully done." This genre of poetry really does intrigue me and opens my mind to deeper thoughts.

[Souladareatease]

Thank You ever so much, very kind...
I fancy these type of writes, a bit dark a little cryptic.
bur self eval. I tend to do in almost every write...one way or the other