Unspoken words

Hiding behind these smiles

are hurts to the fact I can't deny

Falling for you oh girl I knew

is not in time for me to do

Oh girl if you only knew

how easy it is to fall for you

That every moment I hope and pray

you'll feel the same for me someday

Many times I tried to unfold

for hearts are broken due to words untold

but every time before the words be said

that friendship we had cuts the road ahead

Friendship I am afraid to lose

that for at once I had to choose

Keep inside what for you I feel

or let the truth just be revealed

Whatever may even happen

truth be revealed or just be hidden

In my eyes you'll always see

that you're the best part of me.

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Sounds like lyrical to me, kabayan. I like the rhythm of this poetry.
There is fear inside you that is blocking the chance to speak your heart. But I understand, in some cases friendship takes the risk when one tries to tell the true feelings. Anyway, remember that the truth will set you free...
Good job for this piece, kabayan!

[Brigg Aries]

John 8:32 thanks kabayan. a very good reminder to me

[Zephyr]

If you love a girl, its better to tell her rather than bursting ourselves inside. You wont lose your friendship.

However as a poem you well expressed a romantic dilemma well. Good poem!

[cjayph]

What if she feels the same way? What if she's longing to say these exact words to you too? Imagine the excitement about that.

[Dave]

Yes - it is sometimes very difficult to not let the one we love know exactly how we feel. To risk a true friendship, ah, there is the rub. Think though, how much more might be gained if your feelings are returned.

Take care - Dave

[Brigg Aries]

really hard haha thanks

[Dave]

Of course it's hard! That is what you were lamenting in your poem. Do you really think your friendship would disappear if you revealed your truer, deeper feelings?

Take care - Dave

[Brigg Aries]

i dont know really. but most likely yes.

[Dave]

If that is the case then I'mm truly sorry for you. Love, like much of life always has a certain element of risk.

Take care - Dave

[Davidgeo]

If you went a less sappy direction this would be pretty outstanding. It's good writing either way I think.