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Numb

A Poem by Dawn


A day of nothingness within my
heart, mind and soul.

I am empty like a cargo ship.
Filled with hollow spaces.

I am numb. And the noiseless,
so-called tranquillity is killing me.

Dead air all around me within me
and out. Immobilized, lethargic,
apathetic demons are in charge.

To break the pattern and to take
control. I must do something. To
feel, to touch. To react. To speak.
To write down. To act. To release
This intermission I am under.


© 2018 Dawn



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I am also in the same condition now...But again the same thing , edit it and create a poem out of it...Today also you repeated the same thing...You can become a great writer if you try to make a poem out of all of your writings...i wish that you will do it soon...And please do it...I can understand every bit of it...The loneliness that is killing me..
Keep on writing..
Riddhi

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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You are right Dee.
"To break the pattern and to take
control. I must do something. To
feel, to touch. To react. To speak.
To write down. To act. To release
This intermission I am under."
The above lines, we must do often in a life. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts. I will come later tonight and I will read some more.

Coyote


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dawn

2 Months Ago

Bless you Coyote for your being considerate and thought to me and my writings.
Coyote Poetry

2 Months Ago

I enjoyed your work and you are welcome Dee.
and sometimes out of nothingness there is the sense of rationality wherein people try to stop and think why despite that everything is bleak there is still a corner of hope that emanates

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

strong expression...there are comfortable silences between lovers, but there can be uncomfortable silences when we feel totally alone.
j.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow! I can feel the emotions through out this write, So nicely expressed

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I guess it's a season of numbness to many people... :(
But maybe if we try we ca just move a thing or two here and there and then maybe our thoughts will ignite and you never know what cute gems we might end up creating....even in pain or absolute numb feeling...to be able to create a painting out of it would be the best challenge an artist should try for .. maybe that's how we can keep our grey shades aways from our colours... :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I am also in the same condition now...But again the same thing , edit it and create a poem out of it...Today also you repeated the same thing...You can become a great writer if you try to make a poem out of all of your writings...i wish that you will do it soon...And please do it...I can understand every bit of it...The loneliness that is killing me..
Keep on writing..
Riddhi

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 11, 2018
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Dawn

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