Jack and Peter

For a contest

Peter, Peter,

why’d you leave her?

 

Why’d you rather

 drink a liter?

 

Can’t you take

control of your life,

 

help provide

for your kids

and your wife?

 

You get a job

with decent pay

 

but then

 your drinking

 gets in the way.

 

Peter, your family

 wants you back,

 

so won’t

you consider

 leaving Jack?

 

Reviews

[Daniela May]

really cool and fast paced, even though i guess cool shouldn't be the word to describe this poem. i liked it a lot though :) i entered a poem into the peter cometiton to, but it doesn't even compare toy uors, mine drones on and yours is not at all boring to read and just nice i guess :) nice in a weird way because it's kind of quirky :) xxx

[Koda Demitri Tucker-Elr..]

WOW! Im like...blown away by this. It's so...goodness! The story of a man who has a family who cheats on the wife with another man. OH SO COMPLICATED.

I fell in love with the first two stanzas. This almost sounds like a twisted children's rhyme. You can almost hear it echo out of a playground from the mouths of those who play jump rope. Ugh, I cant stand how much I love this poem!!