The Black Widow Spider

It's a metaphor

The Black Widow Spider

Took me alive

Back to her lair

And taught me how to survive

How to eat, live, and breathe

Be feared but not fear

Keep your loved ones far

And your enemies near

She taught me not only

To learn from the light

But its okay to hide and creep

As we wait for the night

How each of her eight

Dreaded black eyes

Is a different personality

And to web yourself in lies

How each of her legs

Builds mazes of lies

They can befriend the world

And then sever its ties

She taught me to bite

To love, to hunt

She taught me to smile

And never be the runt

She taught me to kill

She taught me to grow

She told me things

That you'll never know

So you think I'm your girl?

Your angelic dove?

You think I'm yours

To forever love?

Ha! Our days are numbered

They always were

I couldn't play along

The Lady and her Sir

And watch for my bite

It holds the poison and danger

I learned from the night

So watch your back

When you think I belong to you

'cause I'm a Black Widow Spider

And a girl you thought you knew. . .

Reviews

[Zainab UF]

Ha! Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned!

The metaphor of the black widow spider works out just perfect in this poem. The emotions that throb in this poem are so powerful that you can't help but root for the persona and cheer, "Bite! Bite! Bite!" the "Sir" who sounds (to me) like a controlling freak.

The poem also brings out the fact that fury need not be only of the raging, ranting, fiery kind... but also the icy, creeping type which is infinitely more dangerous.

All in all, a wonderful piece of poetry.

[Owlgirl]

Lol wow! Well I'm glad you liked it :)

[Ethale Captor]

This is excellent. One of the best poems I have read in quite some time.

[Sam Gregory]

Wow! Powerful words on the dangerous side of people

[writingurl14]

Wow this poem is amazing! I love the comparison

[Shia]

Amazing poem!

[Manda]

Fantastic use of comparison in the most literal, and the most metaphorical sense. Powerful piece in it's easy flow and catchy rhymes.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Woah. That was cool and reminded me of someone. Great poem

[Newspaper Skeleton]

I love this. You created a pretty powerful piece with many wonderful metaphors and an abundance of imagery. Perhaps consider revising "builds mazes of lies" to "builds mazes of fallacies"? You used "lies" a couple of lines before and it gives that section a sense of redundancy.

[Owlgirl]

Thank u!!! That is perfect!!!!!

[Newspaper Skeleton]

You're welcome. (:

[SHEEMA HUQ]

nicely considered and arranged with an overwhelming fun element evident throughout your writing.

[selkietales]

Super good :D I love the ending because as I was reading I was thinking, where is this going? And that wrapped it up very nicely.

[Stacey Watts]

Very well written. I liked the way this read. A warning to all of the danger and not to be taken lightly attitude is clear. I like the strength in this. Flows well. Nice work.