The Black Widow Spider

It's a metaphor

The Black Widow Spider

Took me alive

Back to her lair

And taught me how to survive

How to eat, live, and breathe

Be feared but not fear

Keep your loved ones far

And your enemies near

She taught me not only

To learn from the light

But its okay to hide and creep

As we wait for the night

How each of her eight

Dreaded black eyes

Is a different personality

And to web yourself in lies

How each of her legs

Builds mazes of lies

They can befriend the world

And then sever its ties

She taught me to bite

To love, to hunt

She taught me to smile

And never be the runt

She taught me to kill

She taught me to grow

She told me things

That you'll never know

So you think I'm your girl?

Your angelic dove?

You think I'm yours

To forever love?

Ha! Our days are numbered

They always were

I couldn't play along

The Lady and her Sir

And watch for my bite

It holds the poison and danger

I learned from the night

So watch your back

When you think I belong to you

'cause I'm a Black Widow Spider

And a girl you thought you knew. . .

Reviews

[Zainab UF]

Ha! Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned!

The metaphor of the black widow spider works out just perfect in this poem. The emotions that throb in this poem are so powerful that you can't help but root for the persona and cheer, "Bite! Bite! Bite!" the "Sir" who sounds (to me) like a controlling freak.

The poem also brings out the fact that fury need not be only of the raging, ranting, fiery kind... but also the icy, creeping type which is infinitely more dangerous.

All in all, a wonderful piece of poetry.

[Owlgirl]

Lol wow! Well I'm glad you liked it :)

[Kristin]

For some reason I like fell in love with this poem! It drew me in from the beginning and the way the Black Widow Spider teaches the writer intrigues me:) Keep writing!

[Owlgirl]

Wow! Thanks! I'm glad!

[Last Hope]

AMAZING AS ALWAYS :-D
it has a nice flow and rythm of words.
rating 100/100

[Owlgirl]

Yay!!! Thanks!

[Kris]

Nice. I love it. It flows very nicely and you used storytelling and poetic devices effectively.

[Owlgirl]

Thank you!

[xxxrawr_friendxxx]

Really cool :3 It almost has a Sweeney Todd feel to it. Great :D

[Owlgirl]

Lol! Thank you!!!

[Laura Maidah]

"And then sever it’s ties"

Omit the apostrophe. Spelling error. That contracts "IT IS". I love DOVE/LOVE. Great.

the last line is pretty fab.

[Owlgirl]

Have revised! Thank you! :)

[Laura Maidah]

i had to read it again. "your loved ones far" is unclear. From from "you" right? Or from the "enemies"? The locution is nebulous at best and in dire need of an object in my opinion. Just think about it.

[Rebbie Louise]

This is awesome! great job, seriously well written :)

[~LadyWolf~]

Awesome poem! I like the part " Keep your loved one far and your enemies near " and I love the ending :)

[Owlgirl]

Thanks! I'm glad!

[~LadyWolf~]

You are welcome :)

[Doxophobia]

"And to web yourself in lies

How each of her legs

Can build up lies"
This is a bit messy, perhaps find another word? But overall very nice. I really like the concepts presented in your poem. Lovely piece.

[Owlgirl]

I had the same issue in editing, I'm very open to any word suggestions because my brainstorming session failed xD thank you, glad you liked it :)

[Jessika Claire]

No criticism other than this; a bit of phrasing might make the poem flow a little better.
Other than that, I love it.

[quixotic_rose]

Oh I loved this. I read it in a hush hush tone, felt it fit the atmosphere of the poem :) it was beautiful, I just absolutely love it. the comparisons of a black widow spider to the girl, how the girl used those lessons taught. Amazingly written, Loved muches! :)

[Owlgirl]

I'm glad!! Thank you!!