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My friends told me that I could get over you, but they've never encountered you..

They told me in order to get over you 

I had to delete your text messages 

about how much you loved me. 

I couldn't because when I laid in bed at night 

fighting back the urge to break down 

for the second time that hour, 

I read them and they gave me the air I lost. 

They told me in order to get over you 

I needed to never look at you again 

because it shows weakness. 

The first day I saw you again, 

I couldn't fight the urge to not look at you 

hoping that you didn't break my heart the week before, 

and it was all just a bad dream. 

It wasn't, you stared right though me. 

I didn't know how because 

you told me that seeing my smile 

every day before seventh period 

was one of your favorite times of the day. 

How could something that made me feel so strong 

make me feel so weak? 

They told me in order to get over you 

I had to kiss someone else, 

and that it'd make me feel 

so much better about myself. 

They told me I'd get back 

all the confidence you had taken away 

from me when the clock hit twelve. 

So, I did. 

I didn't know that feeling better about myself 

would make me feel so empty inside. 

He didn't kiss like you, 

he didn't look into my eyes 

like you did. 

He wasn't you. 

I'd do anything to take that kiss back 

to get a kiss from you in exchange. 

They told me that I could get over you. 

But they were wrong.

- I promised my friends there would be no more you

Author's Note

im sorry you had to read this basically.

Reviews

[A. Wrin]

Don't be so hard on yourself. This is a very relatable feeling and experience I think all young people go through. I know I've felt this way. I've felt this way probably four times over.

The repetition gives this good rhythm and it reads like a poem but in order to be one I suppose you'd have to reformat a bit.

Overall, it was very emotional and image provoking. Thanks for messaging me :)

[hopeless]

Thank you so much for reviewing. Any advice helps. :)

[Emily]

I love it!
I agree with Chairlie Rae, don't be so hard on yourself.
I love the first line!
You are vary good at starting off a poem!

[Obscured by the Shadows]

This is very depressing, but again very true, people do not often understand the hardships another person goes through simply because they AREN'T that person. This is a very heartfelt and well written poem and I am anxious to read some of your other works

[hopeless]

thank you for taking time to read this, can't wait to post more.

[Obscured by the Shadows]

I can't wait to read it

[emma]

This is very relatable! So many people struggle with trying to get over someone and you capture those feelings perfectly! I love the repition you use, it helps to drive home how hard you've been trying I think. You really capture the process of trying to get over someone very well!

[Dustin Revell]

Love the range of emotion you're able to induce in this. I can really feel the devastation and the emptiness you felt with the trouble of trying to move on. It's not the sadness that tends to get us, it's the numbness that takes its place. The only criticism I have is the formatting, but even that can be a quick fix just by spacing things out some. Well done!

[wordman]

first love,first kiss things you will always reminess,no you will never get over it
but it might be fun trying

[Cool Girl]

I know how this feels. The beginning made me think of a personal experiance. I had deleted all his emails, but later regretted it. We didn't talk anymore, but all I wanted was to read his words.. Atleast just one more time, but there were no words left. You wrote this piece with so much emotion. I believe you have some talent for writing. Thank you for sharing! I look forward to reading more of your pieces when you post some:)

[Ed Fagan]

Wow, I almost forgot what I was like to be young and devastated. Good write.

[hopeless]

Means a lot Ed. Thanks for being my first review. Stay tuned, I'll remind you what it feels like in more!

[Ed Fagan]

I will. :)