mind

mind

A Poem by paul

my mind obscures the street.

my eyes go blind with hunger.

i swim against the night.

© 2015 paul



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Fascinating how you mix senses like seeing, thinking, being hungry in an atypical manner.

Posted 1 Year Ago


it sounds like a vampyr, it's a bit scary, i could imagine a whole long story out of these few lines.

Posted 2 Years Ago


There is the fresh air I was craving. I swim in the same current, I suppose.
Love.

Posted 2 Years Ago


i swim against the night.

That particular line is the kicker in this short piece of poetry.

armin. ...

Posted 2 Years Ago


A clever bit of work.
Strong offering, Paul!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Your poems are too short. They are skillful, but I want more!

Posted 2 Years Ago


then that is your job, because our hungers cannot be allowed to infect the world, now that we see it...

if thy right hand offends thee...

Posted 2 Years Ago


paul

2 Years Ago

Thanks for the brilliant comments Ed.
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~~ i need to learn how to swim against the night from you, coach...

Posted 2 Years Ago


paul

2 Years Ago

you're already the best swimmer i know ..
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2 Years Ago

~~ ohhhhh... no, no... you're the best... but thank you for your kind words, coach... you are a gem... read more
I like the way you express things.. Crystal clear.. Nice write Paul :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


paul

2 Years Ago

Thank you!
Really nice piece!
Short and sweet well written
clear message, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 2 Years Ago



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