silent

just like the fresh scarecrow
i love to stand and sleep
giving away my problems
into a crow's beak
through the rips my insides poke
rotting from the salivas soak

empty

Reviews

[dan]

The fact that this is overwhelming, packing so few words into a potent cocktail; the shortness of the piece hits the reader that he's in for a show. You've shaped your words in such thoughtful kindling, the fire will carry the piece through. GREAT piece of writing, Periac. take care...dan

[Periac]

Thanks For The Read My Friend

[R.E. Ray]

In only six lines, you've painted image and triggered our senses. I can see this "scarecrow" alone under a gray sky, wind-whipped, fraying, completely numb, resigned to nature and it's flesh-picking and certain decay. It's a loss of hope, perhaps well beyond, when we shut down and surrender to the forces around us. Impressive work. So glad I saw this once (since it's more than a few years old).

[Seriana]

9 years ago and still as relevant today.....How far we've come and the pause is again.

[Periac]

Thanks! The reviews are a positive push.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Well, in fights, the fast, powerful punch in the face can win you the fight.
This is, an example, of what I was looking for.
nicely done. though it needs a grammar check, and that is about it.
Well done.

[Ebb and Flow]

I absolutely love this. In just the few short lines you have expressed so much.

Krys

[Legion]

Wow. Great imagery. Depressing as hell, but very well written and such a powerful punch in a short moment. Brilliant work.

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

ooo yes - i read and comm'd on this one before - but then the site errored out and apparently never mosted it >:^O

i understand this emotion so well.. the image is a simple one, and as such far more powerful than more words could possibly have afforded it

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

what a powerful and imagery full little poem, nicely done

[This Page Does Not Exis..]

Periac, you have a way, in a few, short words, of conveying POWERFUL emotional responses. I'm in awe of this. Sometimes, when I read short "writing(s)", I feel like there is no resolution....but here (as always), you express a complete, and solid thought. WOW.

I hope the emptiness subsides, and you are full...again.

Love,
Nancy