My Shout

Sort of inspired by John Green

If God is the world's poet,
we are the side-notes he scribbled in the
margins.
We aren't the heroes,
the victors,
the winners of the game.
Our shouts into oblivion go
unheard,
but still,
I want my shout to be your name.

Author's Note

If you could have one shout...

Reviews

[Nusquam Esse]

I like the tempo that you have here, the way it flows from longer, to shorter lines. I likewise like the concept, the descriptions of us as side-notes in the margins. And the final line is quite powerful. If I was to personally write it, I would have actually left the final line incomplete, to leave it more open to reader interpretation; leaving them really wondering... and also showing the idea of oblivion devouring our screams. Since this doesn't follow any particular form, I have no criticisms; solid write. Thanks for reading.

[Katie Alexander]

I love that idea of leaving the final line open-ended! I've always written poems for my own thoughts, and not for how other people would interpret it, if that makes sense, but I want to try that next time! Thank you!

[Nusquam Esse]

No probs, best of luck unto you!

[terry smith]

Nice!! first you put us all in place and then you put him above all others...that's LOVE!!

[Gabby Nieves]

Love it, beautiful poetry