Tongue Twisted

Tongue Twisted

A Poem by pheasant

Penelope passed the purple pansies
Perfectly potted like pretty planties
Cindy sought to sell selected samples
So Sammy set six succulent stems aside

Freddy found four fan-faced fluffies
Firmly fixed five feet from Phil's foot
Hank handed half, whole-heartedly hoping he'd help
Fanciful Freddy fixedly fitted the flowers fairly

Heading home happy he held himself highly
Wheeling while whistling wild whims
Wandering by winding wisps of wind
Pulling past perpendicular, he parked perfectly

Taking time to translate
Tall tales he told to twelve transfixed travelers
Totaling twenty-two tokens spoken
His tongue twisted... broken

© 2011 pheasant


Author's Note

pheasant
Mixing it up a little

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What a very clever poem , tongue twister. I love the way it reads.. the names of the people and flowers that could cause our tongues to twist if we repeated them.. never have been good with tongue-twisters. Purple Pansies are such sweet and beautiful flowers. My mom always would tell me to look at the Pansy's face and it does resemble a face somewhat.. love this poem .. always good to mix it up a little.. your last verse brings it all home..
"Taking time to translate
Tall tales he told to twelve transfixed travelers
Totaling twenty-two tokens spoken
His tongue twisted... broken"

Wonderful verse and last line.

Chloe

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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haha a very clever write! which must have taken some time to orchestrate!! nice - a tongue twister indeed, playing on alliteration well here! nice!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was a very clever poem. Excellently written, well done! Very, twisted. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So clever. So fun.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This tactfully and tastefully tantalized my tongue with tempting thoughts.

Nice twist of diction dictated!
RLG,
Tommy


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

try to say that three times fast whew Very hard I can read it if i dont sAY IT Very interesting like an old nursery rhyme

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

haha, a lovely creative exercise - and you've pulled a charming poem out of it. great work :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nice! Like thinking outside the box on this one.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a very clever poem , tongue twister. I love the way it reads.. the names of the people and flowers that could cause our tongues to twist if we repeated them.. never have been good with tongue-twisters. Purple Pansies are such sweet and beautiful flowers. My mom always would tell me to look at the Pansy's face and it does resemble a face somewhat.. love this poem .. always good to mix it up a little.. your last verse brings it all home..
"Taking time to translate
Tall tales he told to twelve transfixed travelers
Totaling twenty-two tokens spoken
His tongue twisted... broken"

Wonderful verse and last line.

Chloe

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was a fun read. read it out loud too :) ...fantastic ending...made me smile..

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

love the luscious literary lexicon of linguistic lamentation ~

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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