now i know

i got recently told some things by a friend....wrote this in a minute. first time in a while i've been able to pen somebody else's emotions onto paper.

the people who left without asking me

Jumping out of life with a cordless bungee

Forgive me

I didn’t know that things became so narrow

And the pressure had built up, asphyxiation by sorrow.

Dramatizing with emotions in tornadoes

And hoping to find the blessed happier tomorrow.

Repairing a soul in a dimension of a broken mind

Counter acted achievement, senseless murder of time.

Falsely led that eloquent leaves were sprawling

But reality entails  they weren't even growing

Hopes of a second coming, progression reborn

Destined as an embryo, forever a stillborn.

Reviews

[Harley (arbiter)]

Dark. Relatable. Great vocabulary. Well put together bro. Nicely done.

[nigrum homonculus]

thanks for reading bro, glad you enjoyed it.

[Mark]

Sadness. :( good work, there's one word you might want to reconsider:

"And the pressured had built up, asphyxiation by sorrow." pressured .. should be pressure?

[nigrum homonculus]

thanks for that. i realized JUST as you sent that review. i'll edit it when right away. thanks again for reading mark.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was depressing, but I can relate.....and have felt this before...this was a great write. Thanks for sharing.

[nigrum homonculus]

thanks angie. i am glad...but also saddened by the fact you can relate. thanks for reading.

[Angie Diane♥♥]

Mew...I hate it...when I can relate, but I can...and you're welcome.

[That_Girl]

Dark and meaningful. You did a great job.

Status... I seriously worry about you sometimes, love. No sarcasm. I really hope you're okay. :) Hugs.

[nigrum homonculus]

thank you for reading.

don't. i'm just moody. idk why i am. but i'm really moody.

[That_Girl]

Kay. Maybe you're just late to menstruating? Kidding. :) Come vent anytime.

[nigrum homonculus]

menstruating? lol. yeah if i ever have a problem i'll tell you ^__^

[That_Girl]

Mmmkay. ;) I know which tampons are best sweets. ^_^

[nigrum homonculus]

not surprised

[That_Girl]

Dude.... 9 years. I've had a lot of time to perfect the skill of umm... tampon... err.. purchasing...... heh

[nigrum homonculus]

....LOL....tampon purchasing? it was a craft?

[That_Girl]

Until you stick a s****y one up your vagina, you won't understand. Some hurt like a mofo. Like you're being popped allllll over again. Trust me, it's a craft.