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Windows In Her World

Windows In Her World

A Story by pia

      She sat alone in her little room, locked away from the rest of the world, in a tiny jhonpri . The grilled window was the only vessel that made her feel a part of something, other than the grey walls, the broken bed and the dimmed light bulb. Beyond that window, there was a world which gave her occasional moments of bliss; the sound of laughter from the village children roistering in the murky river water, the smell of parathas and samosas dancing along with the winds, and the yearly village fairs, which brought everyone together. She sat next to the window, in the darkness, and watched this world move on.


   The woman was once a part of all this. Her life beyond those grills was much bigger. She had one thing she now wished she could feel again; hope. In her youthful days, she would splash herself in the river water, enjoy the warmth of the fire and smell of local kebabs. She had friends and a family to feel safe with. That life came crashing down on her, the day she turned sixteen. According to the villagers, she was old enough to be married. But to her, she was old enough to be the woman she desired. She heard of the wonders and achievements of women outside her little village. The woman wanted more than just a small village life. But, here she was, sitting in an isolated  jhonpri, away from the rest. No one spoke to her. The children were told that she was a witch and her jhonpri was a place of witch craft.  No one dared to come near her. They were told she was cursed with the values of the west and consumed by the breath of the devil.


   It was a crime for a woman to be herself in this village. The villagers saw it as a taboo. The women of the village were satisfied with their mundane lives. They were always told what society expected from them. They were raised to fit in the shapes made by that cruel society. But some were born to follow the path leading them away from the ‘norm’. This girl was different. And that was her crime. She saw windows at every point in her life; windows to escape from and find shapes she made for herself. And even after years, and even after the tragedy, she remained different.



   While she watched the children laugh and play, she placed her hand on her face. The burns didn’t hurt anymore, but the emptiness left inside her did. Her left eye’s vision was blurred, but she had learned to make use of her imagination. She had broken all mirrors. The mirrors were a constant reminder of the monsters God left unleashed in this world. She never saw herself as the monster, despite what others called her when they saw her face. The real monster was the man who entered her room late in the night. This monster was the man who had entered her life eighteen years ago with a bucket of acid. The monster was her husband, and this monster had sealed all the windows to her rejuvenation. 


© 2017 pia



Author's Note

pia
acid attacks are a very prominent issue prevailing in the subcontinent. many young girls and also women are subject to abuse and acid attacks from former husbands or men who fancy their hands in marriage. These women have only one crime. to speak up for themselves. And thats their tragedy. they shunned away or harmed for knowing their rights. I too am sometimes looked down on for being a woman stead fast on my beliefs. if not treated this severely, this issue is something everyone should be aware of.

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OMG Pia, please be careful if you are living in this type of situation. Your eloquent, beautifully written, violent, shocking and sad story left me reeling. I know it is a reality for many women. Your words are gentle and lyrical- even your description of the torture that occurred. She is shunned, burned with acid and living in prison, yet she makes the best and carries on. Amazing and inspiring work. Brava!

Posted 3 Months Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

pia

3 Months Ago

I'm not exactly living in this traumatising part of society, however even in PAKISTAN'S modern socie.. read more
Annette Pisano Higley

3 Months Ago

I applaud you for the difference you are making in rhe world. God bless.
Juliespenhere.

3 Months Ago

Yes I agree
I applaud and commend you be careful x
Very tragic what is happening



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And this kind of story is what I like to read. A realistic view of what was happening in the smallest part of the earth still. Most people say it is already over. (Most men to be exact). That fighting for feminism is such a history. Well, not on some side where awareness of the people are still on the hide and negative values as well as murderous cultures are on the move.

Sincerely,
CAPOLAVORO


Posted 3 Months Ago


pia

3 Months Ago

thank you so much !!
This is a very well written story. I love reading stories that serve to enlighten people on what other people are going through. It is very sad that things like this happen anywhere in the world. I am a very introverted person, but my heart hurts when i read and hear about such things happening. Thank you for writing this.

Posted 3 Months Ago


pia

3 Months Ago

im so glad you liked this
Gosh, this story went straight to my heart, and nearly made me weep. How terrible be to locked away, considered a witch, and having to be there for that cruel husband. Just because she saw through the 'lies' and was considered 'different', and wanted to part of a wider life. Well done for writing this story. I think it will help to make people aware of this issue.

Posted 3 Months Ago


pia

3 Months Ago

I'm glad you liked this and felt the woman's pain
thank you so much
Great Aunt Astri

3 Months Ago

You have written about acid attacks, which are happening in several parts of the world. Thank goodne.. read more
So beautifully you have written it, Pia.And it's a really serious issue to be worked on. This story is very well written.

Posted 3 Months Ago


pia

3 Months Ago

thankss !!!
Priyanshi

3 Months Ago

My pleasure.
Yes a moving piece and your writing is good to. I wonder howver if you would drag the reader in even more if you wrote it from a first person perspective. t's such an emotional story, I believe it should be told through the vision of this womans own eyes, so she can own it so to speak, she was the one who lived it.

I feel you could tighten up a few paragraphs so it doesn't feel too repetitive - push the story forward so to speak.

I was also a little distracted by how many times you used the word she, I wonder if you would consider going back and revisiting just how you may be able to reword certain phrases to fix this (although if it was first person that could be rectified quite easily)

I think your writing has depth and emotion and I felt her pain. I liked the use of setting where you mention samosa and paratha, but to be honest I immediately thought she was living in India, perhaps you could set the scene in the first two lines as I also didn't catch on that she was in a small village until you mentioned it.

If you do consider writing in first person - send me a message, I'd love to see how it changes your piece.

You are a good writer - keep going X

Posted 3 Months Ago


pia

3 Months Ago

thanks for leaving such a constructive review
i will approach you if i need any advice on wr.. read more
KWP

3 Months Ago

You are welcome I hope it helps in some small way - we will never improve unless people give us hone.. read more
pia

3 Months Ago

it does
i'm really glad and grateful you took your time out to help :)
Your writing is absolutely stunning. Truly well written. You were able to bring such an important concept into light. A story, a purely fascinating character, the distinctive setting- incredibly captivating. Beautiful job!

Posted 3 Months Ago


pia

3 Months Ago

your review is well appreciated !!
"They were told she was cursed with the values of the WEST and consumed by the breath of the devil." This sums is up.

Posted 3 Months Ago


pia

3 Months Ago

Thankss !!
Very poignant and relevant, Pia.....

It is sad to see such medieval customs still active in modern day society, even though there has been small progress towards equality for women and the freedom for them to pursue the life they choose.

You have written a very soul stirring story in an eloquent way to highlight the dangers still present in some societies. Such violence and degradation of women, forceful marriage against their will and revenge attacks for those who resist the practices are deplorable and must be stopped. Stories like you have written here are just the foundation stone for changing such attitudes and bringing about change for the better. Nicely done.

Posted 3 Months Ago


pia

3 Months Ago

we have oscar winners like Sharmeen Obaid who have spoken about such issues and after her fight agai.. read more
In this tragic tale you have painted the picture of the untold suffering of some women at the hands of a society controlled by men. Men afraid of change, men who need women to be subjugated and cowed and grateful to them. Men who live in the dark ages with dark age values. The story is packed full of pathos in the scene you describe and in her thoughts. An enjoyable if sad read.

Posted 3 Months Ago


pia

3 Months Ago

Thank you for your review !!
A very sad tale you had wrote. I know the practice of acid is used in some country. Even the USA. I will not understand how people can harm a woman. They are our grandmothers, mother, sister and daughters.Thank you Pia for sharing the powerful story.
Coyote

Posted 3 Months Ago


pia

3 Months Ago

You are right !!
Thanks for the review
Coyote Poetry

3 Months Ago

You are welcome Pia.

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