Meanwhile, Without

My archetypal unrequited love poem. The first of a long line of many, unfortunately.

"Meanwhile, Without"

 

Meanwhile without you

Nothing feels right

The rain comes down harder

There's a chill to the night

And will it ever change

Or will I be stuck like this

With my only hope being

The dream of your kiss

 

Meanwhile without me

Your life carries on

With no clever reminders

Of me when I'm gone

And will I ever change

Will you see me like this

And grant to me softly

The gift of your kiss

Author's Note

Written waaaaaay back in 1999, around the time when I first started writing poetry 'seriously'

Reviews

[babyblue]

wow I was going through this emotion,but i'm starting to move on,because in my case i think if the person that once loved you,n you loved,Then u accedently hurt,but didn't mean to sees that your just trying to be firends,and be kind.That they also see that your moving on with your life in some strange way they'll slowly start to fall in love with you again. well that just my opinon. great poem. I have one sortive like this called sweet kisses.

[Mr Whiskers]

So very real in its simplicity, no intricate tricks in the structure. Thats good bc this particular poem has something straightforward to say about the world of the lonely and unmoving. Ahhh, I love it.

[Frances O'Neill]

This is a sweet simple poem!

[Helena]

Beautiful! Loved every line conveying so much loneliness.
I liked your title too. Well done Scott!

Thank you for submitting this very worthy poem to my "Loneliness" contest.

Helena

[Bonnie]

I like the flow and imagery in this poem.
It evokes emotion, feelings of both sadness and hope.

It is the right length, split in two segments.

Good poem for an early effort. Thanks for sharing it now.

[Gray]

Nicely done. Very sweet and endearing. Strong talent shows as well.

Gray