Obsessive-Possessive

You can never have a person whom you don�t know, and even through your rational obsession.

 

 

 

An image waiting to be revealed

Inside a corridor with holes on the floor

Sprawling its path, mimicking the broken walls.

Shadow seeping on the window pane

Devoured by visibility as the Sun sleeps tight tonight

 

Perfume gushed in vulgar ambience

Wore it; a seductively annoying.

Disguised in sober and lovely presence,

Uncloaked the mystery on the broken doorknob,

Enters with the coolest wind and Vanilla Spa.

 

The silken linens that covers the bulked presence

In the bed of white, cloth negligees its indulgence,

The sweet sexy and elusive cunning.

Breathing in anxiously, but dreaming.

 

It leaches its way into the soft cushion

Embedding the skin, touching the nectar of sweats

Unto the white blanket

That dries up in disseminating aura,

Much sweeter than Vanilla Spa

 

Lucid obsession covered the bed

But the wind pursued the howls and screams,

The window shackles, the leaves flown inside

Dusty curtains smoked the silent creeping

And faded the lusty scent, forgotten...

 

A dull image consumed by envy

A mere image disguised,

Just waiting...

Just waiting to be revealed...

Reviews

[LC Coyle]

Your syntax is breathtaking! It's so uncommon; I love the way this piece made me think. "Lucid obsession covered the bed" was one of my favorite lines. It's so sensual. You did an amazing job of conjuring so many sexual images without once introducing a character- and that's hard. "as the Sun sleeps tight tonight" was another one of my favorites, it rolls so well off the tongue. Not to mention it's extremely sexy. Keep it up!

[Dalebear]

love this! It was well written

[Chris Harris]

i still die for this poem.

[Gheeneil]

This is what fantasy does---it never changes anything. The circumstance is still the same. But let's admit it, we enjoy fantasizing. Anyway, I like the use of uncommonly used lines. So original and unique. Keep writing!

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I love this! It was well written. I found that the fifth stanza was the one that said the most to me! Your word choice is very unique.

[Maxinne Marie]

sexy kuno arz.. hehe. well..

i like how the piece transitioned from something that suggests ardent dreamy fantasizing eventually fading away into nothing but a fantasy indeed. a trance.. brought about by obsession.. i love your use of such unique phrases as "Vanilla Spa" and "lucid obsession".. so uncommon indeed. what also struck me is the phrase "the Sun sleeps tight tonight".. awesome personification!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Wow, powerful write, reminds me of one hoping to have that magical lover revealed and yet they do not come yet...Stunning imagery - great write. Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[R J Askew]

Your poem took me right into the pages of that wonderful novel 'Perfume'...the clarity of the percentions and the way you nailed them down...

It leaches its way into the soft cushion
Embedding the skin,

...could almost describe how the poem works with it's tactile cunning.

[Siennaskeleton]

That was an amazing poem.
Your words were breathtaking. I would have never pictured an obsession using the words that you did. It worked great and created some awesome imagary.

[Bubo]

The silken linens that covers the bulked presence
In the bed of white, cloth negligees its indulgence,
The sweet sexy and elusive cunning.
Breathing in anxiously, but dreaming

A very dark sensual piece.........Obsession can just take over, evokes awful emotions that are so destructive, and thats how your piece made me feel...........very good imagary.