the soldier feel on war

the soldier feel on war

A Poem by Irvette Dauphine

leave family and also friend
please, let us go
under auspices of justice
let us fight

although we never come back (we must come back!)
although it is impossible to win (we must win!!)
although life stranded on the battlefield

for our nation
we will fight!!! 

© 2012 Irvette Dauphine


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ohoho....it's a very nice poem.i particularly like reading something whether it is a poem or a story or a article on "war and peace" and on "soldiers".........i really like the second stanza..you express their hope....(what you have written in the brackets).....though they rarely show it.but they seriously want this hope to be true.....a very great poem..keep writing like this.......i think you should sometime read my poem on "war and Military'.which is my first attempt.i hope you would like it

Posted 11 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

11 Years Ago

okay, i'll check yours
btw thanks~
The dark story

11 Years Ago

oh.thanks a lot:)
For the sentence "although we never come back (we must back!)" - is it supposed to be "although we never come back (we must *come* back!)" ? It would make more sense to me if it would.
Also in the sentence below "although it impossible to win (we must win!!)" I would put an *is* between the it and impossible. So, it'll read:
"although it *is* impossible to win (we must win!!)"

Other then that, it was very good - I loved the ending. "For our nation, we will fight!!!" It shows how much soldiers are willing to give for their country/nation - even if they know they may possibly never come back in the end of it all. It was very good - great job :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Irvette Dauphine

11 Years Ago

okay.. i'll fix it..
thanks for the detail of my mistake..
Nightshade

11 Years Ago

No problem
this is pretty good great job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

11 Years Ago

thanks~
Colleen a Bean

11 Years Ago

your welcome :)
I would give you a standing ovation. This was Great and I loved it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

11 Years Ago

thanks~
i really proud that i have idea to make this poem ^_^

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Irvette Dauphine
Irvette Dauphine

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i really like to read books!! and it would be awesome if i can write some story and be a great book writer.. in holiday and my free time i like to imagine stories and in my mood i like to write poems.. more..

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