just silent

just silent

A Poem by Irvette Dauphine
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about my feeling at my school today

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I receive so many mocking glances
Always the same, day in and day out
Sometimes, I can't take it anymore

On the outside,
You see I'm silent and don't care
But inside,
I am crying out

It's always the same
In the end, I try to calm myself
With the sounds of music

Maybe I could mock you as well
However, you have friends
I don't
and you work together 
I don't

Maybe I can have my friend
To calm you down
Or my teachers
To punish you

but, i don't do that
because you have your own life
and i have my own life

i just think that's my challenge
and i must survive with that
i always receive what you say
and don't say anything

if you want to see me angry
you can't
if you want to see me cry
you can't
if you want to see me surrender
you can't

because you already push me
to make me don't care 
what you say to mocking me

but still
that just outside
in inside i am cry out loud

© 2012 Irvette Dauphine


Author's Note

Irvette Dauphine
still fix the grammar problem :/

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Poetry is an important tool in shaping yourself as a young, thoughtful person. just remember to find things to celebrate, and celebrate them the way a poet should: celebrate the thing, celebrate your celebration of the thing, and celebrate your unique mental lens and its capacity to see cause for celebration.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

i'll note it.. thank you very much..



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This describes the exact same feeling that I felt, back in the dark days when I was being bullied. This is an excellent write, because I'm sure many people can relate to it, and it was very well executed :3 Keep up the good work :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

thank you so much :)
How sad, can relate. Especially this line;
"On the outside,
You see I'm silent and don't care
But inside,
I am crying out"

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

thanks~
I think this poem was really good!! And I know lots of people can relate to it

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

thanks~
This is very nice as I've also know what it's like to be bullied. You have shown in this poem strength which is positive. It's really hard being alone and being silent, at what cost? Their satisfaction? No

You have brought your thoughts to empower that you are not to give them the satisfaction they do not deserve :)

I will not say that you should overlook grammar but I felt as though these piece impacted me as the reader quite strongly

Please keep writing

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

i still improve my grammar :)
btw, thanks~
Katherine Enma Pineapple

6 Years Ago

np :D btw it will improve through time
Expresses someones feelings and very touching. Keep writing! 100/100

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

this is my feeling :)
thanks~
Katerina

6 Years Ago

you're welcome
Defiance is radiated throughout this poem, and that's my favorite part about it: your tone. (however, if I were you, I would say to kick the guy or girl's troublesome a*s) This poem kept my attention and made me want to keep reading it through to the end.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

haha.. thanks~
That is a wonderful and if you don't care anymore, they won't annoy you anymore. But this is a wonderful poem. Great write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

thanks~
This is great. I can relate to what you wrote. I was that kid who was pushed and bullied. I never let them see me cry outwardly but inwardly I cried out ... I still go through phrases of feeling like that even now at the age of 45. I is called flash backs from past memories. It envolkes memories and emotions, that makes it well writen.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

thanks :)
It happens to me all the time... it's alright you did have grammar problems but that wont stop you from writing people shouldn't always judge a writing by its grammar well slightly if some wrong grammars made it misunderstandable... But in your writing the meaning is really visible so it's okay... (;

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

okay.. thanks anyway.. :)
I don't feel like this much but it's good to remind me that many of my frined will go thought this. Because my friends may listen to the bullies but i never do, anyway good work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Irvette Dauphine

6 Years Ago

yea.. it always happen to high school student..
thanks~

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Added on August 10, 2012
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i really like to read books!! and it would be awesome if i can write some story and be a great book writer.. in holiday and my free time i like to imagine stories and in my mood i like to write poems.. more..

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