self portrait in black and white

a poem about a man with a split personality

my killer

awaits me

at the door

 

breathe in

breathe out

don’t make a sound

 

my killer

with a shiny blade

carving letters on the wall

 

wake up

open your eyes

save yourself

 

my killer

breaking locks

climbing windows

 

stop your dreaming

greet the dead

you are sleeping

 

my killer

standing over you

knife raised high

 

liberated

false contraption

bitter action

 

he smiles

the mirror breaks

I am left myself

 

the killer remains

I see myself

the killer and I

 

we were

the same

guy

Reviews

[Entropy of the mind]

Chills, I love this.
Especially the message, you can be your own demise in so many instances.
This makes me wonder what is going with this person to put them in such a self-destructive situation, or maybe its just human nature.
Anyways great job, I always love your work. keep it up :)

[plainme]

exactly, we can destroy ourselves just by thoughts, actions do that too but think about how easy it is to have thoughts, once you do think of something it'll float around your big bowl of soup and just stay there, eventually it'll spread like a virus and you won't be able to not think about it. Perhaps it is human nature, but somehow I think that others can also play a huge part in that self-destructive behaviour, they can stimulate it without even knowing it. I really appreciate your kind words and reading your review brightened up my day!

[popourii]

Great work, I like you how you built the suspense!

[plainme]

thanks!

[Nick.B]

Interesting poem and message, shows the real person behind our everyday mask....reminds me of the movie "fight club", anyway great job

[plainme]

the idea probably came from the book, cause I recently read it. But there's some personal additions to that too. Thanks a lot for the review!

[Nick.B]

Woow, last time I read the book was in 01....long time coming :D