Polaroid Blue

Polaroid Blue

A Poem by Asante

The blue-note jazz
is as follows: few will pull through,
even fewer get to breathe.
Wiping down side streets
as desert-brown feathers
on the ground. Get hold 
of the ghettos, if you can,
tell those brothers I ain't coming back.

I'm sewing up the bullet wounds
with smooth warmth and warning
all that run behind me of my ruin. I rise 
like a caffeinated coffee -- never 
needing a spike, just the calm
of the teas and a wall between my seasons.
Leave me to my autumn. Lead me to the smile 
I've seen in others, by the broken heart.

Let's go.

© 2017 Asante



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Always enjoy you literary tools too create a poem bro. "Get hold
of the ghettos, if you can,
tell those brothers I ain't coming back." This reminded me of Nas and his song Not Going back. For you are leaving and he's already gone, but both of you have a bitter sweet resentment for your stomping grounds through what you've had seen and experienced.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

2 Months Ago

I love that reference, bro. Not Going Back. I loved that album back when, Hip Hop Is Dead. You hit i.. read more
sinNsincerity

2 Months Ago

S**t me too man. Check out my poem Eye of W***e-Us VS Osiris, I think you'll like that one.



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This speaks to me. It is sad yet calming. Well written. I really enjoy reading and re-reading this.
Beautiful

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

2 Weeks Ago

Ah, thank you. :)
Leave me to my autumn. That's just the first line that makes me love this piece.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

1 Month Ago

I appreciate that, my friend. Thank you. :)
Superb, The redeeming quality in this is quite breathtaking. Someone who may have seen a lot in whatever space of time and someone who needs peace now and the tones of calm for a while...lovely hon :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

2 Months Ago

I appreciate you, Pop. Your opinion means something. Thank you. :)
Poppy Ruth Silver

2 Months Ago

Always my pleasure hon...appreciate you too :)
Very good descriptions, and powerful wording.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

2 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, Hannah. I appreciate that!
"I rise
like a caffeinated coffee -- never
needing a spike, just the calm
of the teas and a wall between my seasons.
Leave me to my autumn. Lead me to the smile
I've seen in others, by the broken heart."

THIS! Yes, I literally stood up and cheered. Rise like the sun - no way. Caffeinated coffee all the way! This is so serious and yet so playful. So "GAME ON" and so soft and serene. Fabulous paradox. I wasn't sure if I should pay silent homage or whistle to bring the house down.

This was fun, true and spoke right to me.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

2 Months Ago

Hey hey, thank you!

You do your username justice--your review was no less poetic tha.. read more
This is a really great piece. It was giving me James Baldwin "Sonny's Blues" vibes. The descriptions and creativity in this piece is amazing.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

2 Months Ago

Ah, Sonny Blues! That was a beautiful short story, I love that this gave you the same vibes. I appre.. read more
Beautiful :)
Such an amazing composition :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

2 Months Ago

Thanks a lot, Amrita. I appreciate that.
Checking out your work shortly!
Amrita

2 Months Ago

I am very new to it :)
some grow up in such tough environment...the survivors have to smile through it...but some leave it behind...scarred and bleeding but leaving...and telling the others of it...of a place of calm, of refuge...a place to start over.

j.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

2 Months Ago

Words of wisdom. I appreciate them.

Thank you, J.
Always enjoy you literary tools too create a poem bro. "Get hold
of the ghettos, if you can,
tell those brothers I ain't coming back." This reminded me of Nas and his song Not Going back. For you are leaving and he's already gone, but both of you have a bitter sweet resentment for your stomping grounds through what you've had seen and experienced.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

2 Months Ago

I love that reference, bro. Not Going Back. I loved that album back when, Hip Hop Is Dead. You hit i.. read more
sinNsincerity

2 Months Ago

S**t me too man. Check out my poem Eye of W***e-Us VS Osiris, I think you'll like that one.
Very descriptive.
Your diction gives the feel of blue.

You do a good job of providing imagery while providing a somewhat gritty and reflective tone.

"I'm sewing up the bullet wounds
with smooth and warmth and warning"

Good lines.

Lots of alliteration going there.

The ending is somewhat out of nowhere too.

Feels like a call to action after taking in the landscape.

Good stuff.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

2 Months Ago

Your takeaway consists of a lot of the qualities that I drove for with this piece, Alessander. Using.. read more

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