Dance Laugh Understand

Dance Laugh Understand

A Poem by Poetic Beauty

Dance with me
In the pouring rain
Kiss me with wet lips
As the sky cries

Dance with me
But for a moment
Laugh with me
But for a second
Understand me
But for a lifetime

Laugh with me
Under the midnight sky
As joy rises
Circling the clouds

Dance with me
But for a moment
Laugh with me
But for a second
Understand me
But for a lifetime

Understand me
Deep within your heart
Grasp who I am in your bones
Please don't make me feel so alone

© 2017 Poetic Beauty


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This reads like a passionate love song, with the words flowing in harmony and the repetition giving resonance to the theme. I love the delicate simplicity in this piece as well as your unique descriptions in how they express the essence of your lover. Your first stanza, with its imagery (the "sky crying" ... ahhh lovely) sets the ambience perfectly, and I love how you keep that same sense of passion and wonder throughout.
Though (a minor critique) I think it would read smoother if only the lines that began new sentences were capitalized (as opposed to every line), the message still bleeds through with eloquence and clarity. This was penned with a heavenly touch.

- William Liston

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic Beauty

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind review. It is much like a love song. It is some deep feeling from my.. read more



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Lovely Poetic verse Loved reading your thoughts and how your beautiful mind works.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic Beauty

6 Years Ago

Thank you. Many times my mind is drifting off in day dreams.
I love the rhythm in this.

And the pleading for a further connection is very relatable. I think we all have longed for someone to reach us, to understand us more deeply.

Very well done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Poetic Beauty

6 Years Ago

Yes I do believe we all have
This reads like a passionate love song, with the words flowing in harmony and the repetition giving resonance to the theme. I love the delicate simplicity in this piece as well as your unique descriptions in how they express the essence of your lover. Your first stanza, with its imagery (the "sky crying" ... ahhh lovely) sets the ambience perfectly, and I love how you keep that same sense of passion and wonder throughout.
Though (a minor critique) I think it would read smoother if only the lines that began new sentences were capitalized (as opposed to every line), the message still bleeds through with eloquence and clarity. This was penned with a heavenly touch.

- William Liston

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic Beauty

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind review. It is much like a love song. It is some deep feeling from my.. read more
i need all these things...someone to laugh with , to cry with , to share moments with...but most of all someone to understand me for a lifetime....to accept all sides of me...i love the line "grasp who i am in your bones"

those calcium deposits can be rich with love.

j.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic Beauty

6 Years Ago

You got the whole idea. We need someone who understands us deep inside.
Laugh with me /// But for a second /// Understand me /// But for a lifetime ...

.. quite the lines you've come up with. It's must to arrange some "understanding" especially when it comes to "love" -- the faithfulness of trust. It's ev'n the understanding that stands the trust of one's life, and it's love that stands the partner for lifetime. Such beauty of words you've poured down in words. Enjoyed reading this. After a very long span of time, i read something valuable and certainly.. quite pleasant as well.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic Beauty

6 Years Ago

Thank you. The last stanza is because I feel as if my boyfriend doesn't understand me sometimes and .. read more
Adam Adams

6 Years Ago

Without fighting & cliches in love-ship, there's no love-relations. Sometimes, it's okay not to unde.. read more
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Gee
We all long to be loved, cherished, understood.
However, if you go by the writing published on this site, very few find a true love.
It seems unhappiness is a far better pal to the poet than happy.
Very well written Beauty

Posted 6 Years Ago


Poetic Beauty

6 Years Ago

I in a five year relationship and I love him but trust me it's not the same. But honestly I'm happy .. read more
Gee

6 Years Ago

Happy is good......
Poetic Beauty

6 Years Ago

It is good. 🙂
The thrills of love bring vivacity and an exuberance for life that can be spontaneous or pragmatic but either way, an opportunity that must be seized upon!

A finely penned, romantic entreat!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Poetic Beauty

6 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words.
Gentle, worthwhile and needed place create by your words. Dance, laugh and understanding. Three things we must have to know joy and happiness. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic Beauty

6 Years Ago

I am so glad you understood this poem. You always have wise words my friend Coyote
Coyote Poetry

6 Years Ago

You are welcome dear friend.
Very in-depth and powerful.
nicely done

Trace

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic Beauty

6 Years Ago

Thank you. There are many ways this piece can be taken for each person has had their own experiences.. read more
A lovely buoyant celebration of love's longings, the desire to share life in all its fullness and to to be valued as a person, feelings and all.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic Beauty

6 Years Ago

Thank you. Yes we all want to be valued and accepted for who we are

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Poetic Beauty
Poetic Beauty

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