Unrelenting Need

A dream that keeps on sailing through the mind.

Moonlight cascades

Shimmering silver

Light

Upon the naked soul

Caressing with

Brilliance

Wrapped in mystery

 

The a reoccurring

Dream

Glistens with dewy

Pleasure in the mind

Revealing

A need that

Has been suppressed

 

Magnetic figure

Standing in the

Shadows

Illuminated by

Silver stardust

And

Amethyst emotions

 

Tattooed vision

Of unrelenting

Desire

Gazing across

A lake of internal

Distance

Silently stands

With unrelenting

Need

Reviews

[Sethnicity]

I love the word usage here... Unrelenting need, Shadows Illuminated, Amethyst emotions,Caressing with brilliance; very well done. I only see one wobble and that is the double use of unrelenting in the last stanza "unrelenting desire", but I'm not sure if its there to add emphasis to the next time it's used or what but in any case... I feel it and that is most important.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you for the kind review and pointing out the repetitive word. I tried to find another word to fit the emotions and I couldn't so I have left it unchanged.

[Sethnicity]

I totally get it though... I myself need to reach deeper into other languages to find words that can color my hypothetical thoughts...

[Poetic Beauty]

It is very hard sometimes for me to get emotions put on paper but once the words come it seems to flow effortlessly

[Denise]

my favorite part "magnetic figure standing in the shadows illuminated by silver stardust and amethyst emotions" Really can't get much better than that. So mysterious and sexy

[Poetic Beauty]

I love adding mystery into pieces but only when it fits. I agree with you that I love the stanza with the mystery figure.

[Jibey]

Longing and wanting... how often those feelings drive our emotions....'the naked soul', 'caressing', 'amethyst emotions', 'unrelenting desire' and 'unrlenting need'...
oh yes... only the 'dewy pleasure in the mind' to moisten the dryness

[Perfect Mistake]

This seems like a beautiful dream to have. Great work :3

[Lily Mae]

The dream, the need and the desire.. unrelenting.. :) love it..x

[WhiteWillow]

The entire piece reads like a dream, soothing and welcoming. Beautiful words.

[Tina Kline]

This is very surreal and mysterious just like a good dream remembered. This is amazing work!

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Dreams can be an amazing inspiration. Nicely written, captivating piece. Stunning.

[Enigma]

Highly captivating. Well penned.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Need, it can be a ruthless b***h sometimes, you endear me as always, well done, good read.