A lot of action and soraing emotion here... echoes, half-rhymes, rhymes and alliteration... it flows and sparkles like a brook in the sunshine and seems like a celebration of the joys of love... Love the thought of marshmallow moonbeams... soft and yielding, sweet and sensual
Posted 10 Months Ago
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10 Months Ago
I like to write with abstract ideas and make them relate to real life.
I would have got hungry toward the end of this poem, but I just got back from a campfire featuring roasted marshmallows (really burnt on the outside... mmmm :)). So, I was able to collect my inner visions as I read this. Is it just me, or is something brilliantly sensual happening in this write? In any event, the universe is alive and happening, and is jubilant, as you so cleverly pointed out -- sure, time flies as the universe is having fun! I'd dare say, reading this was even better than eating roasted marshmallows --or, this was a great way to top off the day. Thanks :)
A lot of action and soraing emotion here... echoes, half-rhymes, rhymes and alliteration... it flows and sparkles like a brook in the sunshine and seems like a celebration of the joys of love... Love the thought of marshmallow moonbeams... soft and yielding, sweet and sensual
Posted 10 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Months Ago
I like to write with abstract ideas and make them relate to real life.
one of my favorite genres of poetry.
the structure and imagery of your poem is well crafted. reading it for the second time, it really bolded the magic behind it.
Twenty years from now you will be more disappointed by the things that you didn't do than by the ones you did do. So throw off the bowlines. Sail away from the safe harbor. Catch the trade winds in yo.. more..