Family Traditions.

Wrote this during church on 4/6/08

Lord, forgive me.


Sometimes I think
your arms are not strong enough,
your shoulders not broad enough,
your cross not sturdy enough
to carry my sins.

Sometimes I hold
burdens too big for anyone to bear,
vices I've been gripping for all of these years,
the horrible things I hold twistedly dear
because I think it's better than casting them on you.

Most times I cry
because this baggage spins me around,
because these sins are weighing me down,
because all these vices are too many to count,
and your shoulder is my refuge.

Most times I hide
because I know I'm breaking your heart,
because I won't let go, though I'm falling apart,
because I fear change, and I don't know where to start,
but you always know where I am.

Lord, just help me loosen my grip
on the old pains of my past.
I want to live with the joy I once knew,
the joy I was intended to have.

I know it won't be easy,
but I have to do it now,
and I know with you on my side,
I'll lay it all down somehow.

Author's Note

I know the rhymth in the rhyming parts is off, but I don't care. That's actually not what this one's about...

Reviews

[Kristin Brecoe]

Wow. I don't remember my room being this cold because now I have goosebumps. I think they are mainly from reading this.

I think this poem is absolutely amazing! To me it feels professional. And it's pure. Even, though I don't belive in God himself, I believe in what he stands for [hope & faith and the like]. And I hope you are given a chance to let go of all your burdens. You do deserve a life with as much happiness it can muster. I'm sure if you really want this, you will get it. Just make sure you help Him out, by putting effort into leaving it slowly behind. He'll see that is what you really want, and will make life a easier for someone who truly deserves less burden.

-Kristin

[taw]

i love it just the way it is

[bluessadmood]

that was so nice dear ,i believe in God too ,but we are poor sinners ,we can never be perfect so i can see what you are aiming at,very good writing

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

this touched my heart but my darling we all commit sins. we are human god gave us the freedom of choice it's a gift to do as we will. you made such tragic feelings so realistic with your words so much pai so much angst that you express becaue your araid to hurt those around you. i understand i'm in the same positon with my family circle i have done many things to hurt intentionally and inattentionally. i am in the position where i don't know who i am because inever knew who i was or what i am as of now so how can i succeed inknowing what i will let myself become because that is our right. i love your use of imagery and it's so touching a beautiful write very beautiful

[L.G. Knight]

This one is ver sweet very inspirational and wonderfully written.... It is receommended by some that a poet who trully wants to capture the heart of a reader SHOULD change the rhythm and rhyme scheme in their works from time to time so the reader dosen't loose the meaning in the structure... This is very well done and absolutely stunning... I commend you!

~Frances~

[AK]

This is stunning. I didn't even notice the rhythm and the rhyming. This is beyond that, this is your heart and soul laid on the altar before God.
Forgive me for what seems like a shameless plug but please read my piece '1976', it might help. http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/akdale/203505/
At least you'll know you are not alone, that others have stood where you are now and have found their way.
I'd be happy to talk more if you like.

[Jayne Ann Saporito]

You got me to crying here. It is beautiful, what you've written, and so very true. These are words from deep within your heart and they shine. They just shine. Not much more I can say, I am breathless!

[James K. Blaylock]

This is really awesome. Sometimes it's insanely hard to give everything to God.