People

READ it!!!!!! plz? pretty plz?

Showers fall down

To crimson pond

 

Scarlet flowers

Stars beyond

 

Showers, Crystal

Flower's gift

 

It's beauty nearly

Just nearly

Bridges the rift

 

The giggles taunt

Yet beg for followers

They swoon only to fall

 

The petals droop and give

But the survivors

Stand tall

 

 

With the promise

That before

The others thought laughable

 

Now they

Start again

 

The cycle remains

The memories stained

The memories remained

 

Reviews

[Falling Leaf.]

Hmmmmm...this provoked a lot of thought for me. You titled this piece People, so I was determined to figure out the meaning. What I got of it was this:
The beautiful, carefree women will soon fall. Surface beauty doesn't last. Those of us who rely on deeper virtues will survive through the tough times, i.e. high school. "The cycle remains" this makes me think that no matter what, we can't change what the beautiful yet rotten girls will think of us. "Memories stained, remained." We let the beautiful rotten girls get to us, and now we will never truly be sure of ourselves.


Now, I don't know if this is even close to what your message was, but it's what I got, nevertheless.

A good read! Bravo!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

it was pretty close actually! though it was never rly meant to be understood its one of those poems that I want ppl to analyze and figure out what it means to them in their hearts. For me this poem is about the taint brought upon those as innocent as nature and the scar and taint that stains their souls as they continue throught life because of it.

[Falling Leaf.]

A great message, Hannah. The best thing is it is one that can stem off into a million different variations of it, depending on the heart of the reader and what experiences they've been through. I took out of it what I did because I've dealt with "the pretties" before. Thank you

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

then this poem has done its job! :-) and ur very welcome

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. A good journey into thoughts. Artwork and description allowed the reader to ponder beauty, survivor and memories. I like poem with the desire to open doors of memories. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[S]

The meaning behind the words is intriguing...the plastic on the outer of some ppl is beautiful
but fake...its only materialistic glitter...
once you remove crystal and flowers, there is nothing else left...

[kimmy]

I have to tell you that I just love this poem. To fall or stand tall is the key to everything. are you going to let someone or something knock you down and you will stay down or no matter what is going on you will stand back up, again.

I hope everyone would choose to stand tall:)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

im glad you agree :-)

[LadyBug]

I don't know why, but this poem is the most interesting I've ever read.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

rly?! AWesome! I must be doing something right then lol

[Emberlorna]

"It's beauty nearly
Just nearly
Bridges the rift"

My favorite part. Thanks for sharing I really enjoyed :}

[Castonovia]

*They swoon only to fall* plus *petals droop and give*... appearances, beauty is never what it appears to be (prideful creatures who grow old then fall from their pedastal of grace). The ones who endure are with strong willed personalities who once laughed at are now top chain. Another amazing piece ;)

[Captivating Ink]

I love the last stanza. It signifies just...alot of raw emotion and raw truth. Well done :)

[beautiful dreamer]

oh how beautiful i love your ryhme :)

[Becca Bishop]

Wow, I really liked how much this made you think!!!! Good job!!! However, the last stanza kind of ruined it for me. I read the first two lines and they were super amazing!!! And then I read the third one and I was all like "Ptttthhhhbbbb" (that's the sound of me deflating in disappointment while also blowing a raspberry). It just....blah. Sorry. My opinion, I know. Disregard me if I hurt your feelings. That wasn't my intention. I totally loved the rest of the poem though :D :D :D :D Heterogeneous!!! (Happy random word hour!!!)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

you are welcome 2 ur opinion. u win somes u lose somes lol. personally i still like it and one review cant change my mind. mostly i find this review ironic becuase you said that the verse you liked the least is the last where as all the other reviewers said that was their favorite. I guess it really is a personal preference though. im glad you liked some parts though lol