Wind kisses

about innocent girl wanting 2 feel wind against her she coudn't resist, it her father warned her it was dangerous, she finds out why

Rushing wind in my face

Steals the feeling leaves no trace

 

Can you see?

I'll never know

Why my papi tells me no

 

It feels so good

I lean out

 

I catch the wind!

Im real proud

 

My eyes do twinkle

Im in pure bliss

 

I feel a shock

I am kissed

 

I look into the eyes

And what do I see?

 

But sneering, snarling

Death's skull head

Looking eyeless

Lipless, skinless

Back at me

 

And he simply says

"Okaeri"

 

© 2012 Emily Dickinson Jr.  All rights reserved

 

 

 

Author's Note

okaeri means welcome home

Reviews

[Wórdsmíth]

Great, that's an another an amazin' write by "Emily", that's pretty nice too. loved.
but ,ay i ask, whooooo's "papi"....?

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lolt hanx so much orton I'm glad you enjoyed it. Papi is referring to the spanish way of saying father. :-)

[Sir Joseph]

This is a chilling write. Very nicely written. All around Great Poem! Bravo :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

glad you liked it! yeah, iv been told some of my work has a bit of a darker tone.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

There is an actual sense of falling in this piece, which is quite palpable and real. I like the form, and the feeling behind it; lots of good imagery and "food for thought". The second to last stanza is a little off to me for some reason, sort of this big build up and then suddenly it's finished, but I do love the last two lines. Nicely done.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm glad you liked it. Personally I like the drop off type of style. It's kind of like a adrenalin rush thats cut off quick kind of like with an orquestra. Maybe it didn't work but on the other hand I Rly cnt think of a way to phrase it that would make it any better. Anywho glad to hear Ur thoughts :-)

[hundi]

nice job

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh yes is the parent being over protective or do they know best... when something feels liberating and fun it is not always easy to see where it will lead.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

as she found out aptly

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

:)

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

This was lovely but I got a bit scared at the end.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx hahaha what can I say im a bit of a horror lova. plus its about jumping off a building sooo you will eventualy die

[Sarah Marie]

ooo I really enjoyed this! This is so creative! I love feeling the wind on my face and at times feel it is just as alive as you and me, so this really fascinated me! :) Your rhyming scheme was really fun as well.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx lol i dnt rly hv a set thing i do just what I think works pretty much :-)

[Shaylynn H.]

Interesting.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thank you :-)

[Jason Dyer]

Wow, talk about a fast twist! Sounds like a good dream gone terribly wrong. Love the structure as well!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

It kinda had to be fast ya know? cuz dieing from accidents like that rly are very fast. Im happy you enjoyed it :-)

[taboo.poet]

Wow. This was really good. I wasn't expecting the ending at all...did she die? The ending was a bit confuzzling, but this is still very good.
If she did die, I love how the mood totally shifts from light and airy to dark.
Great write&keep it up :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

yeah basicly she fell and died but didnt realize it cuz it happened so fast she only realizes it when she sees the grim reapers face and he tells her welcome home.