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A Poem by Asante

I pressure my questions
to feed me answers;
I quest for the messages
in my antics,

the Ketamine
warding off other pressures;
I haven't become
my own anesthetic,

chasms in the paint
wear away masquerades;
fissures in the floral
wore my ground to death,

I live in the mind,
I hang from a rope
hung over the skies,

what if every
dream I've drawn
shifts the cosmos inside?

what if life's
a simulation of
every unopened eye?

one can dream to dare
behind hubris and nappy hair,
right?

© 2017 Asante



Author's Note

Asante
Just a wave of thought, part two.

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You paint different picture here. Hanging from a rope hooked over the skies, I see the suspension is on the infinite then.
Bringing the cosmos into the soul and being hung on the cosmos is the essence of this write for me, Asante, because we are all that only. Only one has to realize this. Thus this write is a gem for me. It speaks about the process of speaker/seeker who can dare to dream behind the hubris and nappy hair( in your own words).
It is an absolute pleasure to read such writes.

P.S. In Indian thought, the inner is more complex than the outer so saints always speak about mastering the inner to understand and get linked up better with outer. For me this write is like a process of contemplation in a poetic way.


Posted 9 Months Ago


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Asante

9 Months Ago

Your takes are always legitimately interesting, Bala. I'm fairly familiar with Indian culture as my .. read more
Bala Gorthi

9 Months Ago

Thank you Asante. I am glad to know that you are familiar with the Indian culture. It is surprising.. read more
Asante

9 Months Ago

So humbling. Bless you too, Bala!



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You keep having these thoughts Asante. There is an abstractness to this, a dreamlike quality I liken to some of the work that was produced in the 60's i.e.

Windmills of My Mind.

Just the right ? to make the reader dig into his own feelings. One can certainly 'dream to dare'. Keep up the thoughts.
Good write.

Posted 9 Months Ago


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Asante

9 Months Ago

I went ahead and read over the lyrics to that song, and I can understand where you make the connecti.. read more
A tidal wave :) Brilliant, one can dare to dream but each dream shifts perception and perspective to the ultimate...always thought provoking reading you :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


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Asante

9 Months Ago

Right on the money. :) Always good to know your thoughts on anything, Pop.
Some very deep thoughts, Sante :-)
It really amazes me how we tend to go beyond conventional theories to give a breathing to our inquisitive quest. What to say! The way you weave your words is like an art that has its own beauty and uniqueness. Searching and seeking for the unknown is a journey in itself. And one should dare to dream whatever may be the outcome.
I loved these words a lot...
I live in the mind,
I hang from a rope
hung over the skies,
what if every
dream I've drawn
shifts the cosmos inside?
what if life's
a simulation of
every unopened eye?
one can dream to dare
behind hubris and nappy hair,
right?

Beautiful write, Sante :-)
Keep up the good work.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

You share some really wonderful thoughts on my works, Mana. I always appreciate knowing what you tho.. read more
Talk about a wave of thought to keep you up at night! Many of these are questions I like to think many of us ask at some point at least once in our lives. It's more than likely that the real truth is that we probably will never know the answer to most of these questions, but you can never find any answer if you don't look, right? Anyway, this is a nice stream of thoughts you have here. Keep thinking about these things. It's good for the mind to wonder and wander. :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

Absolutely, Dan. You break away from seeing everything in terms of math and science when you let you.. read more
what if every
dream I've drawn
shifts the cosmos inside?

Amazing lines.

This piece is one of my favorites of yours for sure. Your quest is really beginning to take shape and turn to form. These questions are carving like arrows. Keep sharpening their tips. I feel as though you are on the cusp of answers you may seek. Not to sound like a psychic ha, but your form as I said is really beginning to mold itself. Beautiful to witness.

Phoenix

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

Excellent words, brother.
My writings are just my way of making sense; the language may not b.. read more
Your poems should be in a book! Every single one is different, excellent crafted and so lovely. I'm always going to different places when I read your poems :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Asante

9 Months Ago

I'm flattered. x

It's all a journey. Writing is one of the languages of the world and.. read more
Giullia King

9 Months Ago

I feel the same way :)
Bless you, Asante!
Another beautifully worded philosophy. Clearer though this time in comparison to your other piece(s). Conjures up such great and marvelous images in my head again. I love this provocation, on the most positive and beyond everything else level. I abs love the stanza in cursive font. Floral, another great choice of word it I like to use too from time to time, mingles the rather dark hues of this stanza with something lighter yet scarred, something like tainted beauty yet only partly.
"what if every
dream I've drawn
shifts the cosmos inside?"
This one almost made my mind scream in awe because it's the most relatable composition I've ever found in someone else's work. I've often thought alike, actually constantly do.
It also makes me think of Goethe's Faust, in a way. Faust is seeking knowledge about the world and what lies beyond. It is not exactly what you shared but might have the sense of it a bit, I think it goes into a similar direction although that could be applied to your entire piece, this one and part one, also. "see what holds the earth together in its innermost elements" (Goethe, Faust). Most decent translation I've found. But as you might know, meaning always get lost in translation to some extent.
I love the clarity of this one, and still it is as well crafted as your others not even lacking metaphors or wonderful expressions. It seems to shine in brighter colors, an overall lighter layer. Well, what else can I say but you write what's hidden in the depths of my mind.

Posted 9 Months Ago


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9 Months Ago

I even thought about your writing as a painting, although I might be overinfluenced by a lovely arti.. read more
Asante

9 Months Ago

I just can't get past how you shape entire portraits with words. I've since come to the conclusion t.. read more
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9 Months Ago

I'm glad my weird interpretations etc are somehow relatable. Selfish is the artist's work. That's na.. read more
oh this is beautiful. Intriguing questions you have opened. makes me think of the movie ''Mr. Nobody'' .
A perfect addition to my library ))

Posted 9 Months Ago


Asante

9 Months Ago

The 2009 sci-fi movie that Jared Leto was in? You make great movie comparisons, I'll give you that!<.. read more
Ana B.

9 Months Ago

hahah, yes, that one :) thanks

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