BEAUTY OF LIFE

BEAUTY OF LIFE

A Poem by Prateeksha Khot
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This is a Than-Bauk. The Than-Bauk is Burmese and has Three lines, four syllables each. And the fourth, third and second syllables respectively all rhyme.

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It's a bright day
as I lay here
with gay memories

                               Watching the trees
                               as the breeze play
                               with teasing arms.

                      Flowers at brink
                      of rosed pink; dipped
                      in ink of hues.

                                In azured skies
                                Butterflies flit
                                With ties of love.

Knowing that life
though with strife, is
still rife with BEAUTY.



© 2010 Prateeksha Khot



Author's Note

Prateeksha Khot
My first Than-Bauk so please bear with me. An kindly suggest improvements.

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Interesting write...I was unaware of this verse form...A good attempt...The picture accompanying the poem is also very nice...Perhaps the use of all that colour in the lines was unwarranted...Also, I feel the grammar is off in a couple of places. You've made use of good imagery, but I feel it can be done better...There have been so many poems written on nature over centuries, so in order to establish your uniqueness, I feel you must add that special ingredient of your own, which I found missing here.
Nevertheless, its a good poem...you can only get better with time...Keep writing... :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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great imagery

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I was unaware with this type of form. But really liked it. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

really interesting, and beautiful

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Interesting write...I was unaware of this verse form...A good attempt...The picture accompanying the poem is also very nice...Perhaps the use of all that colour in the lines was unwarranted...Also, I feel the grammar is off in a couple of places. You've made use of good imagery, but I feel it can be done better...There have been so many poems written on nature over centuries, so in order to establish your uniqueness, I feel you must add that special ingredient of your own, which I found missing here.
Nevertheless, its a good poem...you can only get better with time...Keep writing... :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

a wistful beauty

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this Than-Bauk and like your nature poem in this (to me) unfamiliar format. Love the garden path in the picture!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this. My favorite poems revolve around nature and humanity. It makes so much sense. Great job!!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you have an in depth knowledge of poetry it seems ... everything right from the picture to the coloured fonts set the tone for your write ... a cheerful , hopeful write from a bubbly girl !!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The last word of your poem captured the essence of your content. Beautiful.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this write :) how did you get it to do those colors like that :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Prateeksha Khot

Mumbai, Maharashtra, India



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