BEAUTY OF LIFE

This is a Than-Bauk. The Than-Bauk is Burmese and has Three lines, four syllables each. And the fourth, third and second syllables respectively all rhyme.

It's a bright day
as I lay here
with gay memories

                               Watching the trees
                               as the breeze play
                               with teasing arms.

                      Flowers at brink
                      of rosed pink; dipped
                      in ink of hues.

                                In azured skies
                                Butterflies flit
                                With ties of love.

Knowing that life
though with strife, is
still rife with BEAUTY.

Author's Note

My first Than-Bauk so please bear with me. An kindly suggest improvements.

Reviews

[Augustus]

Interesting write...I was unaware of this verse form...A good attempt...The picture accompanying the poem is also very nice...Perhaps the use of all that colour in the lines was unwarranted...Also, I feel the grammar is off in a couple of places. You've made use of good imagery, but I feel it can be done better...There have been so many poems written on nature over centuries, so in order to establish your uniqueness, I feel you must add that special ingredient of your own, which I found missing here.
Nevertheless, its a good poem...you can only get better with time...Keep writing... :)

[Akshat♥]

I'm unaware of this writing before...so thanks for sharing it..this one is beautifully written...this poem has more sense then it looks to you...it seems that you have good knowledge.../Great...keep writing:)

[Smooth J-cool]

great imagery

[lavina k.]

I was unaware with this type of form. But really liked it. :)

[NoAirToBreatheXSuffocat..]

really interesting, and beautiful

[Tate Morgan]

a wistful beauty

[Desert Dreamer]

I like this Than-Bauk and like your nature poem in this (to me) unfamiliar format. Love the garden path in the picture!

[SamBug]

I love this. My favorite poems revolve around nature and humanity. It makes so much sense. Great job!!!

[the_stoic]

you have an in depth knowledge of poetry it seems ... everything right from the picture to the coloured fonts set the tone for your write ... a cheerful , hopeful write from a bubbly girl !!

[Dutch Jr.]

The last word of your poem captured the essence of your content. Beautiful.