Aching Love

My heart was broken long ago

if I can love I hope to never know

The feeling I felt is empty and shattered

the love I had before left me broken and tattered

The depth of my soul is empty to the core

the scars that I have are deep and sore

I'm left with that feeling of hopefulness and more

aching from the Love I had once before....

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to forget our first true love. Take time and separation. I understand the poem. I went years without the desire of real love. Sometime our safety net can become our prison. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jeannear]

that is very true.....thank you I appreciate that comment

[Roger Turgeon]

You have some good thoughts but I think you could put them together in a better flow. It seems redundant to say "feelings I felt".

Example; try...
The feeling I had is now empty and shattered
the love I lost left me broken and tattered

I hope you take this as constructive. Just trying to help ( : O ). Keep writing

[BlackRose]

Nice. Great rhyming. We never can forget our first love. But we get stronger in due time depending and we find a true lasting love down the line.

[Jeannear]

thank you for stopping by and yes that is true we never forget :)

[Cassie]

Most of us have gone through such feelings but after the hurt we always come out stronger

[Jeannear]

yes we do cassie thank you you

[An owl on the moon]

Such a beautiful, bittersweet essence moves through your world... still lit by the lingering light of a love once shared. May you find it again, and may it always fill you with pure joy.

[Jeannear]

thank you so much that comment means alot

[An owl on the moon]

We so appreciate your presence here... :)

[David]

I felt this many times in my short life and you've described it well, wonderful job kido lol

[Jeannear]

yea I've felt it to myself......thank you for the comment kido lolo :))

[David]

You're welcome :) and if you ever need to talk I'm here ok

[Jeannear]

ok ill keep that in mind....:)

[David]

ok sounds good :P

[Sarah]

Wow thats deep and that is exactly were i am now. thanks for writing this.

[Jeannear]

thanks tweety everybody goes through this in some point of their life.....just be strong :)

[icelandicblue]

This one is sad. You've got great rhyme and meter in this one.

[Jeannear]

thank you....:)