journey..:)

sitting back behind in d ultimate journey of mine,
i see the rain by the window pane in my flight,

dreaming of the sun to come and shower light,
and waiting for d thunder to behold in sometime,

i dont aback my self from the journey of mine,
all i do is travell and wait for the threshold cover,

there a'nt no pause a'nt no gain everything almost in vain,
still climbing thoughts of mine i wait for the sunshine to arise,

then there came a positive beam of light bringing smiles in sight,
and the flight took its pace landed everyone completely safe,

learnt to wait for d time n that nothing remaining dark all d time,
there is hope in every prayer of mine which is always answered by lord divine...

Author's Note

plz do tell me how it is..and improvements needed for ma work..

Reviews

[Ali_Avery~7]

I like the wordings you use. It made me think, but it's a good unique style. :) Great job!

[Dayran]

We all share our concerns with everyone, but between the journeys, the dreams, the sun, flights and the dark, we also have to say, which one?

[Dove]

I really do like this poem. my favorite lines are

there a'nt no pause a'nt no gain everything almost in vain,
still climbing thoughts of mine i wait for the sunshine to arise,

You did a great job on this piece. keep writing