A SILENT GOODBYE..

A SILENT GOODBYE..

A Poem by prodicallife
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itz a sort of conversation between two spirits....when a person is not ready to accept the fact that he is dead what happenzzzz...read along..

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ME: why m i being dragged off
where are you taking me
set me free, let me go
my love is waiting for me


SOUND: stop your breath, close your eyes

noone is there waiting for you
wake up from the dream, watch yourself

and find out who are you..!!

ME: oh! who i'am and where i am??
my sound crackd out loud


SOUND:
set yourself inside the little grave,
you are not allowd to move out


ME:
hey! where did you bring me????
why is it so stifling here??


SOUND:
you are nomore a part of living world..
just lie down..close your eyes

 you can rest in peace over here

ME:
no!! just let me go
my love wouldn't sleep without my night rhyms


SOUND:
huh! she has learned to sleep, learned to smile alone
it's been long time


ME:
hey! how much time has passed by,and why have i been sleeping for so long?

SOUND:
it's been several decades from dusk to dawn
you are at peace,at rest after a long imprisonment of being used upon.


ME:
HUH! you old perilous man
watch my love walking towards me..
♥♥

SOUND:
you are a life away from her,it happens each day to me!!
look at the tears rolling down,the shivering steps moving slow.
who says inside the grave you live happily..i know how hard it is to see your love falling low.


ME to my LOVE: heY!! y are you so down,y did you cry???
there was nothing i could hear else then my love screaming out in tears.... Y DID YOU DIE..??

AND BY THE LAST I GOTTA REALIZE....


it was A SILENT GOODBYE..!!..

© 2011 prodicallife


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This very sad, but completely awesome.

Posted 11 Years Ago


prodicallife

10 Years Ago

Hi Tavionna,

I am blissed to read you felt the same, what I tried to do deliver throug.. read more
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Sid
Very interesting write, you have touched on a subject not often discussed and in my opinion you have done great justice to it. I really like the ending because it seems to carry a sad message...great work!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


prodicallife

11 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Sid

Your words mean a lot, and it's my honor that you read my work thanks .. read more
This is an intriguing piece... the dialogue between the two spirits are emotionally charged. Intense! There is a profound sadness in the end. Nice work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


prodicallife

11 Years Ago

Robbbie

Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing my work, your words just gave a fleet to.. read more
Got flown away with the feelings ! Nice ! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow! Unique topic also...this has moved me love...truly amazing piece! Such intensity of emotions roll through this...extremely well thought out also...a fav! xx

Posted 12 Years Ago


the structure is really great and it is just so wonderful!

Posted 12 Years Ago


gosh..it made me say out loud a big ¨WOW!!!¨
i´m a big fan of yours..i love it.!:))
i hope i could write poems too like u do..

Posted 12 Years Ago


Poetry in a form of conversation is a real hard work to make..
but you did justice to the work and i would really appreciate
I am an immature writer not much knowledgeable about literature nor is it my stream but all i can make about is this piece of art is damn good..
:D

Posted 12 Years Ago


Writing in a language that is not your own brings difficulties I can't comprehend.

But your words transcend that barrier Realy well, and though I'm not a believer in this afterlife I still enjoyed the read :0)

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on July 31, 2011
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prodicallife

jaipur, rajasthan, India



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i`m a writer of my own destination, Hi this is Saurabh Bhatia...random thotsss invade my mind all the time....LOVE is what i would like to specify izzz my favourite field.. LETA HU TERA NAAM HR PAL .. more..

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