A False Love?

To express a broken heart.

Day after day I gave you my all

But you couldn't return the favour,

Was I really in love or just a plain fool

Because my feelings do tend to waver.

I truly believed that what we had was real

A connection so deep and so true,

We admitted to our love and signed the deal

And all I could think of was you.

Everything was perfect between you and I 

The love we shared so pure,

I never want to see you die 

Because baby you are my cure.

We've hit another bump in the road

But my love there is no need to worry,

Just follow the rules of the 'couples code'

And start it of with a sorry.

Something feels off, I can feel a change

You don't talk to me like you used to,

What could have possibly happened to feel this strange 

Is it something I did that hurt you?

And then it happened... The message which broke my heart

Was all of this an evil lie?

I can't believe I couldn't see this happening from the start

Now I just lay in bed and cry.

You never really loved me

Maybe I was just good for your ego

You weren't the person I thought of you to be

Because why would let me go?

You destroyed me and left me battered

I never thought you'd leave me,

My heart, all of its pieces shattered

I am now a wreck just look at me.

It saddens me how you claimed to love me

And yet replaced me so quickly. 

You've made false accusations towards me

Leaving others to believe my nature is prickly.

Day after day I gave you my all

But you couldn't return the favour,

Was I really in love or just a plain fool

Because my feelings do tend to waver.

  

 

Author's Note

Please feel free to tell me what you think.

Reviews

[conversations with her ..]

I really enjoyed this poem, and I’m looking forward to reading more of your pieces. I'm kind of new on here and it would be an honor if you can review my 4 new recent poems. (The world is ours, Nostalgia, Paradise, and You)

Thank you and Keep up the Good work!

[Phoebe Taylor]

Thank you very much, I’m so glad you enjoyed it! I’d be delighted to check your pieces out :)

[Mr. D]

Making someone your world is a fool's errand. But if you enjoy pain and misery, go for it.

[Eliza Elliot]

I just discovered your work and this is by far my favourite. Correct me if I’m wrong but you have experienced what you’ve written? I’ve been in a similar situation and it has inspired my writing also. I only have one published so far, I’d appreciate it if you checked it out. You might be have been able to relate. As far as your poem goes, I think it’s splendid. It shows real emotion so well it was as if I felt your pain. I’m glad I came across your account. Looking forward to more work from you! :)

[Phoebe Taylor]

Yes my writing is definitely inspired by my own experiences. I’m so glad you like this piece, thank you so much! And I’d be delighted to read your work.

[Duncan Brown]

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[Darcy]

When will you be posting your next piece? Love your writing! Great structure and beautiful meaning. Good job.

[Phoebe Taylor]

Working on a couple of pieces at the moment, hoping to finish something soon :)
Thank you for your kind words.

[Ghania]

Very lovely! Feel the real power and pain of love!
Well-done Phoebe. :)

[Phoebe Taylor]

Thanks so much! :)

[Ghania]

You're welcome😊

[emipoemi]

The theme is powerful; most of the imagery is strong; there is emotion in every line......however what it lacks is a fluid musicality - so many lines are a little too wordy for the musicality to carry over, because there's a hang-time of sorts before we finally hit that last beat. With a polished musicality (and an eradication of the modifying "do"'s.....for those two lines actually don't need it), and this would be a gem. Well done!

[Phoebe Taylor]

Thank you for your feedback :)

[OldAccount]

Amazing. Incredible... The depth and story is great, the rhyming is good, and the overall tone is beautiful. A really splendid poem, great job!

[Phoebe Taylor]

Thank you :)