A House that Hides Secrets

A House that Hides Secrets

A Poem by Kayleen
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Grandmother's House

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A house that holds secrets
Dead letters of past
White wings of egrets
Hide whispers or laughs
Frightened of asking
The thoughts in your mind
A shadow play dancing
More questions unwind
The secrets; The hiding
You wait to discover
Sneaking and spying
You finally uncover
A letter; A face
A clue to your past
Before its too late
The truth's in your grasp

© 2018 Kayleen


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Kayleen
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SB means "should be"
MSB means "maybe should be"

"letters of past" MSB "letters of the past"
"egrets" MSB "regrets" Do you mean the bird or is it a typo I can't tell.
"before its" should be "it's" with an apostrophe
"truths" MSB "truth's" depends if you mean plural or if the meaning is "the truth is in our grasp"

I recommend using punctuation with this one.
I know not every poem uses punctuation, but commas would help here.

Great tension. Fitting images. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


i liked the poem...flow is just amazing...i just love the way you have described the house...nice work:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


The horrors of your forgotten memories!

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Ben
Spooky! Sorta. I really like this. It does make sense, you know? Good job, once again!

Posted 14 Years Ago


I loved this the flow was amazing. I like the wording. This was a great piece. I love how you describe the secrets the house has. Great job


Posted 14 Years Ago


Every house. every home. has its secrets.
Some are better left burried.
Great write.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on July 21, 2009
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Kayleen
Kayleen

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Kayleen. 22. California. I Like Old School Punk Rock, Electro nonsense, and Katy Perry. The Mighty f*****g Boosh. Everything else amazing overseas we dont have here. I make movies, bad decisions.. more..

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