Atrocity

Atrocity

A Poem by Kayleen
"

sometimes my blankness gets the best of me

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i am worried
I think there might be something wrong with me
No song has ever given me goose bumps
No movie has come with chills
I try to relate to friends
Who cry
For things that are fixable
Stories that are fictional
That are material
And meaningless
To the world
To me
I try
I cant
But I look
With morbid curiosity
At dead things in the road
In the news
I look at my life
At the tragedies in your life
In my life
I am not sad
I am not frightened
I am not disgusted
I look
I see
I feel.....
Nothing.

© 2014 Kayleen


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Kayleen
PLEASE if you take the time to read the poem I would appreciate if also take a moment to leave a review. Thank you!

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I really really liked this poem and the ideas behind it. I understand not knowing why you don't feel anything. I've had periods of time in my life like that.
Sometimes, though, looking back you realize you did feel things. You just didn't recognize it at the time.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Very relatable. I'm glad I read this. Flows well, the word choice is just the right amount of showy and direct. I like "I am not frightened I am not disgusted" and "morbid curiosity at dead things in the road" and "fixable .. fictional .. meaningless ... material"

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is hard hitting, loved it. The tragedy and its after effects are so well portrayed.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I link how you start it off with 'i am worried'
It just made me want to read more!!
Keep it up!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I really really liked this poem and the ideas behind it. I understand not knowing why you don't feel anything. I've had periods of time in my life like that.
Sometimes, though, looking back you realize you did feel things. You just didn't recognize it at the time.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raw and direct...well done!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Easy to hide emotion. Each of us are built different. I like the thoughts and questions brought to life in the words. Emotion is a two-sided coin. Can make you feel weak when overtook with and dead in heart when we don't. This poem open the door to a lot of coffee and conversation. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


The form of your poem captured me, the moment I saw it. It is an interesting poem, but I feel a little lost after reading it. There are a lot of components and characters to it and I am just not sure what the focus on.

Posted 14 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow, this is intentfully powerful and the title fits like the perfect puzzle piece finishing the image, the emotion, the hard coating that colors this steel reserve, a real pleasure to read kayleen.

Posted 14 Years Ago


A strong emotional write here!
A very relatable one. I lke this and the set up you used!
Very well written.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Kayleen
Kayleen

Anaheim, CA



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Kayleen. 22. California. I Like Old School Punk Rock, Electro nonsense, and Katy Perry. The Mighty f*****g Boosh. Everything else amazing overseas we dont have here. I make movies, bad decisions.. more..

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