Breathe a Stench of Self Decay

Breathe a stench of self decay

Falling down address the day

Paste a smile on your death mask

Never realize what you lack

You keep a hard grip on your drink

weaving lies so full of holes

Just to watch them sink

You laugh too loud, get in their face

That threat of violence you can taste

Dont give a f**k when they push you down

Youll laugh at them from on the ground

Smiling as the pain intensifies

Know its worse for them

Theyre still alive.

 

Author's Note

commetns please? feedback is greatly appreciated :)

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very raw and intense emotions displayed here... that was straight forward take no prisoners approach, but in life that is sometimes needed to get through to someone... I take this as speaking to an alcoholic and they need to hear it without sugar coating and this piece certainly does that. No matter what this is about it is a solid piece of writing.

[C. Rose]

Love the idea of lies sinking, and great last line.
Paste a smile is another great line.
Missing apostrophes "Dont" and "Youll" and "its worse for them" and "Theyre"

[luciddreamer]

This is one awesome knock out write....to bad you held back...(just joking).....I like the way you tell it like it is.....

[InkSlinger]

F*****G AMAZING.. You rock! Raw, intense.. hard reality, so full of anger.

Babe you got a dangerous appeal
know you can do anything but feel

Just about sums it up for me..

[Michael X]

Wow. stunning depth, to me this is the total depiction of a person tossed to the ground, looking up, to
a world that lacks fundamentals as a whole is the appeal, brilliant job