Save Me

lyrics.

Father

I am calling

Father

I am Falling

Messiah

Can you save me from this hell

Im losing myself

Father

I am crawling

Father

 I am falling

Hosanna 

In the highest

Can you save me from myself

Release me from this cell

Help me stand back on my own two feet again

Father

I jumped I fear I am drowning

Father

In my head alarms are sounding

Emmanuel 

Please save me from myself

Messiah 

I am pleading

Deliverer

I am bleeding

and i see the knife has been 

In my own hands

Father take the pain away

Just take it all away

God save me

God save me

God save me 

Save me from my self

God save me

God save me 

Release me from myself

Release me from myself

Author's Note

if you took the time to read it please review it. thanks ( the flow might seem a little funky when you read it, but with the melody it works fine)

Reviews

[Dennis Shanaberg]

and i see the knife has been
In my own hands
These lines were kind of awkward. It kind of threw off the pace of the poem. The sentiment in them was awesome though. The fact that the pain we feel is usually self inflicted, not the fault of God as most people feel the need to blame him.
Overall, though the poem was fantastic. Other than the two aforementioned lines, it flowed beautifully. I also found it awesome how many names you found to describe Him. You may even want to trying in a few more, to break it up even more.
Anyways, a great piece, that could just maybe use a little more working up.
Keep it up.

[Crow]

Awesome mix of christianity with the heartaches of everyday life, and the mistakes we can make.

[Martina]

well written ^_^
I can easy understand it without going back twice ^^

[Alice_In_WhateverLand]

i really like this =o) I could see it as a song sung by 30 Seconds To Mars ♥

[.ronald.039.]

I dug it. Religion isn't the easiest topic to handle and you took it head on.

[Emily Quinn]

This could be a powerful song with the right melody behind the words. I liked this poem, it has a different style/format which I really enjoyed. I like how you have the subject pleading for help from anyone they feel may offer assistance, so desperate to overcome this obstical. great job

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Wow, now this was one very strong piece of writing. Very complex yet very very thoughtful and striking.
Great work here.

[Orlando Murcia]

I really loved that you called upon the lord
at every corner in this piece

It relates to a lot of people
even if they are ashamed to admit it

Great write Kayleen


Orlando M

[K. Carver]

I'm at this point at this very moment.
It's amazing to see just how I feel through someone else's eyes.
Thank you for sharing.
Well done.

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

When I was much younger my prayers were a lot like this..then at some point I finally understood that all I had to do was believe it was already done..strange as it seemed so hard to do then and it just kept getting easier.. writing helps ..well done

[An owl on the moon]

Powerful, flowing beautifully like a Psalm. Your words, even though filled with a sense of pain, bring about a feeling of hope in God's help...