first love

first love

A Poem by LynLee

First Love



I couldn't believe it,

he had said the words,

and typed the words,

All I could do was sit there,


like a statue in a snow storm,

my body grew numb,

what do I say?,

What do I do?,

Do I love him back?,

Is any of this true?

I could only think of one thing to do,

I walked.

I walked to him,

I stood in front of him,

I pulled him to me,

And I said,

"I love you too.''

© 2010 LynLee

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This is wonderful and cute.
Enjoyable read.

Posted 8 Years Ago

This is your best piece I think.. I'm not totally sure why.. but It's probably cause you're writing from your heart.. It's honest.. pure.. I absolutely love your imagery.. frozen/statue/numb.. very good choice of words.. he caught you off guard and that paints that picture quite well.. most of us have been in that situation.. It's always good to get the reader thinking of a past memory of their own.. it put me into your poem.. Very good job! Keep writing this way!! and Thank you again for sharing! 100/100 but only cause I can't give you 150/100

Posted 8 Years Ago

wow this was so cute! i could really feel the love in this piece! it was short and yet so meaningful! i remember when this happened to me, but feeling ever! I am happy for you! woo! well done =) and good luck

Posted 8 Years Ago

hahaha gonna be awkward for u monday...

Posted 8 Years Ago

That was so sweet... I loved it, and the ending was perfect.

Posted 8 Years Ago

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Added on April 4, 2010
Last Updated on May 19, 2010



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