Garden of Sprites

Garden of Sprites

 

I sit in the garden

on a small marble bench

beneath the sun.

The roses bud,

and the lilies grow.

The water glows and makes music

as it falls down the stream

of little waterfalls.

 

I follow the stream

into a land of beauty

and wonder.

I walk around to see wild flowers,

patches of four leaf clovers

and small rainbows.

I follow them to find no gold,

but to find a smaller garden.

 

Little Sprites dancing

in the middle of a circle.

They dance in little trebles,

and hornpipes.

A celebration it seems.

 

I didn't wish to intrude,

but I found myself

gazing in amazement

as I sat in the

Garden of Sprites.

 

 

 

Author's Note

soooooo, not my best peice, but please realize i am not changing my work. unless it is spelling errors......thanks!

Reviews

[Aggie Skeleton]

Funky, diffrent. I like it.

[Different Wings]

lily's?

[SarahCortland]

I actually like this not usually my type but I can picture it you did great. I can see myself watching it's almost peaceful ;) I really like this good job

[Harley Ann]

i LOVE yoyur work. there's always something about it that really seems to capture the wonder you see or feel. I hate to repeat the popular 'magic' and 'beautiful' adjectives that seem to work really well at describing this piece, but what else can I say? of course, there are a few grammar/spelling errors ('lily's' is 'lillies') but other than that this is really a magnificent poem :)

[Eva]

this is one of my new fav. it"s magical,beautiful, and u find yourself wrapped in a new little world. plus i love the title! i couldn't but help wonder what it was.

[Havatara]

Are you sure it isn't your best? It was magical and beautiful and so much more! Then again, I just watched "Barbie as Rapunzel" because I wanted to feel like a little kid for an hour and a half, so I might not be thinking entirely straight, but I thought it was amazing.

[Calypso]

This poem is grand. The title made me want to read this. Sorry I waited so late to read it after you sent the request.
Your poem was able to take me to another, magical place.
Well done.

[A.Lee]

No, I love this! Beautiful and enchanting. I smiled at the imagery in the last two stanzas... I could just imagine that scene and how beautiful and amazing that would be. Very nice work.

[Nayan]

Hmmn! On the rhymes front - not so good
But again, the free-flowing nature of your poem is amazing! It is as captivating as a mystical or a suspense novel :)

[Desert Dreamer]

Oh, the wonders and mysteries to be found in the garden...what a surprise, and what an amazing poem, I love it!